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To begin with, it is 100% true that the rapid increase in the car ownership has lead to a big traffic jam.

To begin with, it is 100% true that the rapid increase in the car ownership has lead to a big traffic jam. 02W9
To begin with, it is 100% true that the rapid increase in the car ownership has lead to a big traffic jam. Why did I say that? It is simply because of some examples that have been occured widely, one of them, for instance: In Indonesia, having our own cars is a mandatory thought throughout the society. It is believes that the quality of services as long as the passangers security of the public tranport are very bad. Thus, people are more likely to use their private vehicles than public transportation. However, as the result, the amount of time that people spend for commuting is very enormous. The ussual duration from Bogor to Jakarta is just 60 minutes in the rush hours without the traffic jam, but with that occurence, the duration increases to about 120 minutes. This what we called as the big stuck.
To
begin
with, it is 100% true that the rapid increase in the car ownership has lead to a
big
traffic jam. Why did I say that? It is
simply
because
of
some
examples that have been
occured
widely
, one of them,
for instance
: In Indonesia, having our
own
cars is a mandatory
thought
throughout the society. It is believes that the quality of services as long as the
passangers
security of the public
tranport
are
very
bad
.
Thus
,
people
are more likely to
use
their private vehicles than public transportation.
However
, as the result, the amount of time that
people
spend for commuting is
very
enormous. The
ussual
duration from
Bogor
to Jakarta is
just
60 minutes in the rush hours without the traffic jam,
but
with that
occurence
, the duration increases to about 120 minutes. This what we called as the
big
stuck.
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IELTS essay To begin with, it is 100% true that the rapid increase in the car ownership has lead to a big traffic jam.

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