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Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.8

Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 8
In this contemporary era, Internet has become a vital tool in accessing information. A segment of society believes that Internet supplies significant information, while other believes that too much of information could lead to several problems. My agreement is with the former however it can give a rise to some issues which cannot be neglected. On one hand, one of the reasons for agreeing on the notion that Internet gives essential information is the provision of data. To elaborate more, experiences, researches and other factual information are contributed online by many people around the world. As a result, it could be of assistance at some point of time. For instance, a group of eminent doctors uploads the symptoms of fatal disease such as dengue, malaria etc which could be helpful for a person to diagnose at the early stage. Therefore, Internet could be a useful gateway in enhancing the knowledge. On the other hand, excessive information from the internet may augment some concerns. One of the challenges could be its authenticity. To explain more, Internet is an open platform in which any one can upload the data. In addition, the uploaded data may lack its accuracy. Thus, relying on such data could be detrimental. For example, to avoid visiting doctors, some people rely on the remedies given online for the treatment of their illness. This could put the health of those for a toss. Hence, Internet being an information provider could provoke various consequences. In conclusion, internet has made our lives easier by providing handy data. Nevertheless, its reliability still lacks conviction.
In this contemporary era, Internet has become a vital tool in accessing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
. A segment of society believes that Internet supplies significant
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
, while other believes that too much of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
could lead to several problems. My agreement is with the former
however
it can give a rise to
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some
issues which cannot
be neglected
.

On one hand, one of the reasons for agreeing on the notion that Internet gives essential
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
is the provision of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
data
. To elaborate more, experiences, researches and other factual
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
are contributed
online by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
around the world.
As a result
, it could be of assistance at
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
point of time.
For instance
, a group of eminent doctors uploads the symptoms of fatal disease such as dengue, malaria etc which could be helpful for a person to diagnose at the early stage.
Therefore
, Internet could be a useful gateway in enhancing the knowledge.

On the other hand
, excessive
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information
from the internet may augment
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
concerns. One of the challenges could be its authenticity. To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
more, Internet is an open platform in which
Did you mean "anyone"?
any one
can upload the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
data
.
In addition
, the uploaded
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
data
may lack its accuracy.
Thus
, relying on such
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
data
could be detrimental.
For example
, to avoid visiting doctors,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
rely on the remedies
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
online for the treatment of their illness. This could put the health of those for a toss.
Hence
, Internet being an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
provider could provoke various consequences.

In conclusion
, internet has made our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
easier by providing handy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
data
.
Nevertheless
, its reliability
still
lacks conviction.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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