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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Before making a decision, it is important to find out if the decision will be popular with others. Use examples and reasons to support your position. v.45

Before making a decision, it is important to find out if the decision will be popular with others. Use examples and reasons to support your position. v. 45
Family environment and upbringing has huge impact on the psychology of a child. There are several people who opine that the value system with which the parents raise their children, is the prime reason for the success of their children. The essay will discuss reasons why I completely agree to it. To begin with, it is widely known fact that parents are our first teachers. It is justifiable evident that children during their early years try to emulate their parents in every possible way. For instance, a pilot study done in France indicates children learn around 90% of the things from their parents. They try to imitate them in every possible way. Thus, it is very much necessary for parents to teach good moral values like punctuality, humanity, sharing and other values to their child. In addition, children must also be made self-reliant and independent so that they get the necessary lessons required once they explore the real world. However, children raised by parents who lack the necessary moral values tend to engage in antisocial activities. This further explains why children’s coming from criminal backgrounds have a rough past. For example, studies have proved that bad parenting or unhealthy relationship between parents and children is one of the prime reasons for juvenile crime rate being on the rise. Several studies point out that unhappy childhood is the root cause of juvenile committing crimes. To conclude, I firmly believe good parenting skills are the foundation stones which results in child’s success. Parents need to form a bond with their children, whereas children who are abused and have a bad relationship are more like to get involved in unethical or criminal activities.
Family environment and upbringing has huge impact on the psychology of a child. There are several
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people
who opine that the
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value
system with which the
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parents
raise their
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children
, is the prime reason for the success of their
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children
. The essay will discuss reasons why I completely
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agree
to it.

To
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begin
with, it is
widely
known fact that
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parents
are our
first
teachers. It is justifiable evident that
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children
during their early years try to emulate their
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parents
in every possible way.
For instance
, a pilot study done in France indicates
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children
learn around 90% of the things from their
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parents
. They try to imitate them in every possible way.
Thus
, it is
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very
much necessary for
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parents
to teach
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good
moral values like punctuality, humanity, sharing and other values to their child.
In addition
,
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children
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must
also
be made
self-reliant and independent
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so
that they
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get
the necessary lessons required once they explore the real world.

However
,
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children
raised by
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parents
who lack the necessary moral values tend to engage in antisocial activities. This
further
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explains
why
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children’s
coming from criminal backgrounds have a rough past.
For example
, studies have proved that
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bad
parenting or unhealthy relationship between
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parents
and
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children
is one of the prime reasons for juvenile crime rate being on the rise. Several studies point out that unhappy childhood is the root cause of juvenile committing crimes.

To conclude
, I
firmly
believe
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good
parenting
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skills
are the foundation stones which results in child’s success.
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Parents
need to form a bond with their
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children
, whereas
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children
who
are abused
and have a
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bad
relationship are more like to
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get
involved in unethical or criminal activities.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
A foreign language is like a frail, delicate muscle. If you do not use it, it weakens.
Jhumpa Lahiri

IELTS essay Before making a decision, it is important to find out if the decision will be popular with others. Use examples and reasons to support your position. v. 45

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
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