Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Some people say that the government should make public transportation free for all users. To what extent do you agree or disagree with it? v.1

Some people say that the government should make public transportation free for all users. with it? v. 1
Nowadays, people have divergent views about whether governments ought to allocate more of their budget to mass transit for all citizens complimentary. I generally agree with this viewpoint, as a focus on public transit will be an essential component of environmental sustainability. The principal reason many people have a positive attitude towards free public transportation is that it saves a lot of money. Firstly, public shipment can ease the issue of the traffic jam which is caused by the growth of private vehicles. Commuters and residents would see no need to drive their cars if there is a free and convenient service that takes them from places to places. Because, public transportation has fully stated-funded, another advantage of using it is that commuters can reduce their transit costs and living expenses. Secondly, the demand for public shipping for all citizens is surging rapidly due to using fewer private cars saves the environment and people’s health as well. It causes less air pollution because the carbon dioxide released by cars is decreased. As all people know that carbon dioxide can harm people’s health, if less carbon dioxide released to the environment, people do not have to breath polluted air inevitably. On the other hand, even if country administrations can get behind a project, they often have trouble mobilizing public money, whether through taxation or by borrowing. These are indeed big infrastructure projects that are needed to be built, and it requires astronomical cost. For instance, in Tokyo, the most recent and in-progress light-rails cost more than $100 million per mile in 1990. Thus, it is unrealistic for the government to introduce public transportation to people completely free. Overall, it is crystal clear that the use of free public shipment should be encouraged by the government so that we can save extra money, health and the environment. However, we also should consider how the government will raise that capital.
Nowadays,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
have divergent views about whether
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
governments
ought to allocate more of their budget to mass transit for all citizens complimentary. I
generally
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with this viewpoint, as a focus on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
transit will be an essential component of environmental sustainability.

The principal reason
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
have a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
attitude towards free
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
transportation is that it saves
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
money.
Firstly
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
shipment can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ease
the issue of the traffic jam which
is caused
by the growth of private vehicles. Commuters and residents would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
no need to drive their cars if there is a free and convenient service that takes them from places to places.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Because
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
transportation has
fully
stated-funded, another advantage of using it is that commuters can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
their transit costs and living expenses.
Secondly
, the demand for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
shipping for all citizens is surging
rapidly
due to using fewer private cars saves the environment and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people’s
health
as well
. It causes less air pollution
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
the carbon dioxide released by cars
is decreased
. As all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
know that carbon dioxide can harm
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people’s
health, if less carbon dioxide released to the environment,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
do not
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
breath polluted air
inevitably
.

On the other hand
, even if country administrations can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
behind a project, they
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
have trouble mobilizing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
money, whether through taxation or by borrowing. These are
indeed
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
infrastructure projects that
are needed
to
be built
, and it requires astronomical cost.
For instance
, in Tokyo, the most recent and in-progress light-rails cost more than $100 million per mile in 1990.
Thus
, it is unrealistic for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
to introduce
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
transportation to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
completely free.

Overall
, it is crystal
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of free
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
shipment should
be encouraged
by the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that we can save extra money, health and the environment.
However
, we
also
should consider how the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
will raise that capital.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
Language is wine upon the lips. – Virginia WoolfInspirational quotes for language learners
Virginia Woolf

IELTS essay Some people say that the government should make public transportation free for all users. with it? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
317 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts