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Some people say that the bicycles are a good, modern means of transportation. Other say riding a bicycle has clear disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In the hustle and bustle of mega cities, how to travel around the city is what has become a hot debating issue. Some presume that with the modernization of lifestyle, bicycles are inappropriate choice to commute in the city; however, contradictory to this notion, bicycles are clearly a modern means of public transportation with merits for individuals and the environment. On the one hand, ordinary people are of the opinion that bicycles are failed to compete with conventional transportation at present. Consuming physical energy to ride a bike is considered to be slower than cars or trains. Therefore, it requires a great deal of time to get rid of traffic gridlock in crowded areas. Additionally, it creates concerns in terms of safety. Were students riding a bike to school, they may have accident in rush hours in the city and injuries would be inevitable. Thus, bicycles seemingly are not competeable with other modes of transportation. On the other hand, many people such as environmental activist strongly condemn the former view. They believe that nothing is as environmentally-friendly as bicycles for the environment. Not only does bicycle reduce the usage of fossil fuels, but it also increases the air quality. Demands for petrol would be definitely lower than now if people choose riding a bike over driving their own car. Therefore, exhaust fumes would not be emitted as much as now and this can possibly result in fresher air. More importantly, doing so would be cost-effective for citizens. Reasonably-priced bicycles can easily be rented or bought and there would not be requirements for buying train or bus tickets; even petrol payments would be eliminated. Thus, it is perceived to be economical as well. To summarize, although some may suppose that bicycles are not safe and fast enough for todays hectic lives, in my perception its benefits for people and their cities obviously outweigh the drawbacks.
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, how to travel around the city is what has become a hot debating issue.
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Some
presume that with the modernization of lifestyle,
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bicycles
are inappropriate choice to commute in the city;
however
, contradictory to this notion,
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bicycles
are
clearly
a modern means of public transportation with merits for individuals and the environment.

On the one hand, ordinary
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people
are of the opinion that
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bicycles
are failed
to compete with conventional transportation at present. Consuming physical energy to ride a bike
is considered
to be slower than cars or trains.
Therefore
, it requires a great deal of time to
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get
rid of traffic gridlock in crowded areas.
Additionally
, it creates concerns in terms of safety. Were students riding a bike to school, they may have accident in rush hours in the city and injuries would be inevitable.
Thus
,
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bicycles
seemingly
are not
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competeable
with other modes of transportation.

On the other hand
,
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many
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people
such as environmental activist
strongly
condemn the former view. They believe that nothing is as
environmentally
-friendly as
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bicycles
for the environment. Not
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only
does
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bicycle
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reduce
the usage of fossil fuels,
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but
it
also
increases the air quality. Demands for petrol would be definitely lower than
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now
if
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people
choose riding a bike over driving their
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own
car.
Therefore
, exhaust fumes would not
be emitted
as much as
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now
and this can
possibly
result in fresher air. More
importantly
, doing
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so
would
be cost
-effective for citizens.
Reasonably
-priced
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bicycles
can
easily
be rented
or
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bought
and there would not be requirements for buying train or bus tickets; even petrol payments would
be eliminated
.
Thus
, it
is perceived
to be economical
as well
.

To summarize
, although
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some
may suppose that
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bicycles
are not safe and
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fast
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enough
for
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todays
hectic
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lives
, in my perception its benefits for
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people
and their
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cities
obviously
outweigh the drawbacks.
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IELTS essay Some people say that the bicycles are a good, modern means of transportation. Other say riding a bicycle has clear disadvantages.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
314 words
5.5
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