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Some people say that the amount of noise that people make should be strictly controlled. Others say that people should be free to make as much noise as they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.3

Some people say that the amount of noise that people make should be strictly controlled. Others say that people should be free to make as much noise as they wish. v. 3
Throughout the twenty-first century have been increasing the population of people, due to countries tending for urban sprawl, and technology have been changing dramatically; thereby all these factors significantly increase the level of noise that now named the noise pollution. Therefore, some people, especially the scientists, want strict control of noise level; however, others have the opposite view. Overall, in my perspective, people should adjust the noise level because the scientists have proof that it leads to a more healthy life. On the one hand, people have different devices that loud sound, or they tend to make noise party. Consequently, in their opinion, restriction of noise level is touching such activities that are broken freedom of people in part "do that you want". Besides, on the surface of the problem with loud lie traffic congestion, there people create a lot of cacophony; thereby private vehicles undergo strict control too, and it leads to a trouble with the next liberty of people. For example, the ban on private cars leads to implement public transport that cuts the right of choice. Notwithstanding, the scientists prove what all around the world suffer from noise pollution in the part of the sickness, therefore they want to adjust the level of loudness that diminish such problem. For instance, Bali implements the day of silent when nothing works, and the scientists notice significant changes in this day in wildlife. Moreover, in Canada, for preserving some species of fish, the volunteers ask to create on ship less noise, because all loud destroy hearing that hinder navigation and hunt. Likewise, people throughout the years, in megalopolises, more and more complain of headache and problem with hearing. To conclude, I think people around the world should understand the depth of the trouble, and unavoidable strict control of some type of noise in the future their and environment.
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first
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people
, due to countries tending for urban sprawl, and technology have been changing
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; thereby all these factors
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level
of
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noise
that
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now
named the
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pollution.
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,
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some
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people
,
especially
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scientists
, want strict control of
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noise
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level
;
however
, others have the opposite view.
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, in my perspective,
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people
should adjust the
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noise
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level
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because
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scientists
have proof that it leads to a more healthy life.

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people
have
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different
devices that loud sound, or they tend to
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make
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noise
party.
Consequently
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noise
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level
is touching such activities that
are broken
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people
in part
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.
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create
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; thereby private vehicles undergo strict control too, and it leads to a trouble with the
next
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people
.
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, the ban on private cars leads to implement public transport that
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the right of choice.

Notwithstanding, the
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scientists
prove what all around the world suffer from
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noise
pollution in the part of the sickness,
therefore
they want to adjust the
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level
of loudness that diminish such problem.
For instance
, Bali implements the day of silent when nothing works, and the
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scientists
notice significant
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changes
in this day in wildlife.
Moreover
, in Canada, for preserving
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some
species of fish, the volunteers ask to create on ship less
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noise
,
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because
all loud
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destroy
hearing that hinder navigation and hunt.
Likewise
,
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people
throughout the years, in megalopolises, more and more complain of headache and problem with hearing.

To conclude
, I
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think
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people
around the world should understand the depth of the trouble, and unavoidable strict control of
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some
type of
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noise
in the future their and environment.
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IELTS essay Some people say that the amount of noise that people make should be strictly controlled. Others say that people should be free to make as much noise as they wish. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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Grammatical Range: 8.0
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Task Achievement: 8.0
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