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Some people say that sex education should be taught in schools as a formal subject while others believe that there are more effective ways for students to access to sex education rather than teaching it at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

Some people say that sex education should be taught in schools as a formal subject while others believe that there are more effective ways for students to access to sex education rather than teaching it at school. with the statement? 2R0yA
Opinions are divided on whether schools should add a formal subject relating to sex or pupils should get to this field through other better ways. I agree that sex education at school is a must, despite On the one hand, sex education could reduce the frequency that students have sex and also the danger of not understanding sex. First, Lon Don has recently etablished that about half of high school students admitted to have had sex at least once while only twenty percent of them know safe approach. Other studies in other schools which has taught students about sex show that only 30 percent of their students have had sex. However,
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.
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, Lon Don has recently
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that about half of high
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school
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students
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at least once while
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twenty percent of them know safe approach. Other studies in other
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only
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IELTS essay Some people say that sex education should be taught in schools as a formal subject while others believe that there are more effective ways for students to access to sex education rather than teaching it at school. with the statement?

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111 words
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