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Some people say that science study should be mandatory in schools, others argue that it is unnecessary. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people say that science study should be mandatory in schools, others argue that it is unnecessary. m13q1
Indeed, Science is an important subject, and the role it plays in our day to day life is inevitable. Some individuals believe that science education in schools should be made compulsory whereas, there is a different opinion among some persons that science study should be an optional one. In my viewpoint, Science should be taught to children from their young age itself so that the interest in that subject increases when they grow up. In a civilized society, new inventions are much needed. Without the support of Science, it is practically impossible to discover anything. On top of that, young brains always have the capacity to absorb new things when compared to teenagers. Therefore, sowing the science seed into the brains of children should start from the schools. Moreover, it is essential for any country to strengthen itself in some key fields such as space and defense. So, without any significant advancement in Science, any country will fail to compete with other nations. On the other hand, the prominent reason for the deficiency of interest in Science among juveniles is lack of infrastructure. Science is the only subject that cannot end with books. Hence, an excellent experimental set-up is required for any schools to encourage their students. Even though some schools have a good lab, there is a lack of eminent teachers. All these factors are responsible for the decline of interest among students and parents. Finally, in my opinion, science education is significant as other educations. Thus, it is the duty of Science ministry in any country to invest more funds into the science department, and thereby encourage young kids to learn, and practice from their childhood. To summarize, Science plays a vital role in human life, and their contribution to society is enormous. It is a true statement that juveniles are not showing much interest in native Science because of the emerge of computer science. Lack of infrastructure and teachers are also responsible for the interest decline. So, a government should take responsibility to bring back the interest among students by conducting workshops, and inject more funds into it.
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Science
is an
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important
subject, and the role it plays in our
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day to day
life is inevitable.
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Some
individuals believe that
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science
education in
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schools
should
be made
compulsory whereas, there is a
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different
opinion among
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some
persons that
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science
study should be an optional one. In my viewpoint,
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Science
should
be taught
to children from their young age itself
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so
that the
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interest
in that subject increases when they grow up.

In a civilized society, new inventions are
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much needed
. Without the support of
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Science
, it is
practically
impossible to discover anything.
On top of that
, young brains always have the capacity to absorb new things when compared to
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teenagers
.
Therefore
, sowing the
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science
seed into the brains of children should
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start
from the
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schools
.
Moreover
, it is essential for any country to strengthen itself in
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some
key fields such as space and defense.
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So
, without any significant advancement in
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Science
, any country will fail to compete with other nations.

On the other hand
, the prominent reason for the deficiency of
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interest
in
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Science
among juveniles is lack of infrastructure.
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Science
is the
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only
subject that cannot
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end
with books.
Hence
, an excellent experimental set-up
is required
for any
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schools
to encourage their students.
Even though
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some
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schools
have a
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good
lab, there is a lack of eminent teachers. All these factors are responsible for the decline of
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interest
among students and parents.

Finally
, in my opinion,
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science
education is significant as other educations.
Thus
, it is the duty of Science

ministry in any country to invest more funds into the
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science
department, and thereby encourage young kids to learn, and practice from their childhood.

To summarize
,
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Science
plays a vital role in human life, and their contribution to society is enormous. It is a

true statement that juveniles are not showing much
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interest
in native
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Science
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because
of
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the emerge
of computer
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science
. Lack of infrastructure and teachers are
also
responsible for the
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interest
decline.
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So
, a
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government
should take responsibility to bring back the
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interest
among students by conducting workshops, and inject more funds into it.
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IELTS essay Some people say that science study should be mandatory in schools, others argue that it is unnecessary.

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