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Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part

Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part NVlA2
A plethora of people aknowledge that youngsters should be supported to participate in organised team activities by parents in order to leisure time. On contrary others believe that children needs to learn own things. Let us discuss the both the given views followed by my perspective in the subsequent paragraphs. To began with, there are two different views which will be discussed ahead. In my opinion group learning is extremely good than self learning despite of this toddlers gain skills and follow disciplines which is more essential parts of sports. Along with has learner new things and rules by team and established great relationship with them as well. For instance, sense of competition are generated through play in teams. As a consequence, make use good of free time by playing in team. On the contrary although children become more intelligent by learn ownself nowwithstanding adopt a bad habbits. Alternative learn new activities with team time has consumed in playing games on telivision and mobile phone alone at home due to this future has gone beyond destruction. Hence, their understanding and thinking is not match with parents and others. To conclude, I personally believe team activities is better than self leaning to devote leisure time by play and work in team groups.
A plethora of
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people
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aknowledge
that youngsters should
be supported
to participate in
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organised
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team
activities by parents in order to leisure
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time
. On contrary others believe that children needs to learn
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
things.
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Let
us discuss the both the
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given
views followed by my perspective in the subsequent paragraphs. To began with, there are two
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different
views which will
be discussed
ahead. In my opinion group learning is
extremely
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good
than self learning
Did you mean "despite" (or, alternatively, 'in spite of')?
despite of
this toddlers gain
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skills
and follow disciplines which is more essential parts of sports. Along with has learner new things and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
by
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team
and established great relationship with them
as well
.
For instance
, sense of competition
are generated
through play in
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teams
. As a consequence,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
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good
of free
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time
by playing in
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team
.
On the contrary
although children become more intelligent by learn
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ownself
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nowwithstanding
adopt a
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bad
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habbits
. Alternative learn new activities with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
team
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
has consumed in playing games on
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telivision
and mobile phone alone at home due to this future has gone beyond destruction.
Hence
, their understanding and thinking is not
Consider using a past participle here: "matched".
match
with parents
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and others
.
To conclude
, I
personally
believe
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
team
activities is better than self leaning to devote leisure
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
by play and work in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
team
groups.
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IELTS essay Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
211 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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