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Some people say that now we can see films on our mobile phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

A segment of people, getting admired by the technology, believe that it has left no reason to watch movies in a theatre, which, however, is opposed by the other portion of people saying that cinemas still hold a significant place in the sources of entertainment. I concur with the second viewpoint as I opine that theatres provide an incredible experience. To embark on, the individuals who favor the use of cellphones, laptops and tablets say so due to the effortless and convenient access to the movies. The technology, through its tremendous impact, has enabled the netizens to watch any movie at the click of the mouse, for which, there is no need to go outside houses. Furthermore, there are plethora of websites such as Netflix, Amazon Prime and Hotstar etcetera, by which the ardent fans of films can buy membership for a long period of time and that too at a plausible price. On the flip side, the proponents of cinema houses reckon that the benefits of cinemas are incomparable. Firstly, the presence of enormous screens, high quality sound system, 3D and 4D watching experience is the one which is hard to get at home. Secondly, huge audience in the auditorium creates an exuberant atmosphere, which as a consequence, adds more charm and joy in the environment. As far as I am concerned, even though we have the amenities provided by the technology, the cinemas are always irreplaceable. The movie houses are a great opportunity for the families to go out and spend some quality time together when everybody is engrossed in their lives. In conclusion, the statement of whether the people, instead of going to cineplex, should rely on their electronic items, has differing viewpoints. Admittedly, internet has made it extremely easy to enjoy any movie while sitting at home, nonetheless, the idea of going to cinemas holds much water because of the lively experience it provides.
A segment of
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people
, getting admired by the technology, believe that it has
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left
no reason to
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watch
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movies
in a
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theatre
, which,
however
,
is opposed
by the other portion of
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people
saying that
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cinemas
still
hold a significant place in the sources of entertainment. I concur with the second viewpoint as I opine that
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theatres
provide an incredible experience.

To embark on, the individuals who favor the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of cellphones, laptops and tablets say
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so
due to the effortless and convenient access to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
movies
. The technology, through its tremendous impact, has enabled the netizens to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
any
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
movie
at the click of the mouse, for which, there is no need to go outside
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houses
.
Furthermore
, there are plethora of websites such as Netflix, Amazon Prime and
Possible spelling mistake found.
Hotstar
etcetera, by which the ardent fans of films can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
membership for a long period of time and that too at a plausible price.

On the flip side, the proponents of
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cinema
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
houses
reckon that the benefits of
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cinemas
are incomparable.
Firstly
, the presence of enormous screens, high quality sound system, 3D and 4D watching experience is the one which is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
to
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get
at home.
Secondly
, huge audience in the auditorium creates an exuberant atmosphere, which as a consequence,
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adds
more charm and joy in the environment.

As far as I
am concerned
,
even though
we have the amenities provided by the technology, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cinemas
are always irreplaceable. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
movie
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
houses
are a great opportunity for the families to go out and spend
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
quality time together when everybody
is engrossed
in their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
.

In conclusion
, the statement of whether the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
,
instead
of going to
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cineplex
, should rely on their electronic items, has differing viewpoints.
Admittedly
, internet has made it
extremely
easy to enjoy any
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
movie
while sitting at home, nonetheless, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
of going to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cinemas
holds much water
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of the lively experience it provides.
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IELTS essay Some people say that now we can see films on our mobile phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema.

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318 words
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