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Some people say that modern technology has made shopping today easier, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Doing shopping through the internet this days become more easy. and others will say that modern technology make humans lazy. On the considering the statement we will discussing the both views. On one hand, Now a days modern technology became more popular and make work easily to save time. Technology developing day by day. today every one is using smart phone its became source of our life. By use the smartphone they can order what they want with the help of modern technology at any time and any where. People using different kind of shopping platform apps they can buy from sitting in their homes, offices etc. , this kind of online shopping became more popular and its save time. If we can buy any kind of items like clothes, electronics, groceries, home furniture etc. , We check the prices the shopping apps are providing offers and coupons with these we can get the product in a best reasonable cost. On other hand, Doing online shopping will have some drawbacks. Firstly people became more lazy. There is lot of difference in doing direct shopping and online shopping. In direct shopping we can check by detail took and see the quality and exact colour of the product. But in online we can look the product by virtual mode we see the image of the product but we can't check the quality. But for that reason some platform are giving return options and refunding the money if we don't like the product. In my opinion, Compare to the drawbacks shopping in online having more advantages like save time and money. We can buy anything from anywhere.
Doing
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shopping
through the internet
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this days
become more easy.
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and
others will say that modern
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technology
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make
humans lazy. On the considering the statement we will
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discussing
the both views.

On one hand,
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Now a days
modern
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technology
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became
more popular and
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make
work
easily
to save
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time
.
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Technology
developing day by day.
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today
every one is using smart phone its
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became
source of our life. By
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use
the smartphone they can order what they want with the
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help
of modern
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technology
at any
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time
and
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any where
.
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People
using
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different
kind of
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shopping
platform apps they can
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buy
from sitting in their homes, offices etc.
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,
this kind of
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online
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shopping
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became
more popular and its save
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time
. If we can
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buy
any kind of items like clothes, electronics, groceries, home furniture etc.
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,
We
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check
the prices the
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shopping
apps are providing offers and coupons with these we can
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get
the
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product
in
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a
best reasonable cost.

On other hand, Doing
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online
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shopping
will have
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some
drawbacks.
Firstly
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people
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became
more lazy. There is
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lot of
difference in doing direct
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shopping
and
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online
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shopping
. In direct
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shopping
we can
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check
by detail took and
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see
the quality and exact
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colour
of the
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product
.
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But
in
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online
we can look the
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product
by virtual mode we
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see
the image of the
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product
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but
we can't
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check
the quality.
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But
for that reason
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some
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platform
are giving return options and refunding the money if we don't like the product.

In my opinion, Compare to the drawbacks
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shopping
in
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online
having more advantages like save
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time
and money. We can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
anything from anywhere.
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IELTS essay Some people say that modern technology has made shopping today easier, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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  American English
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