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Some people say that modern technology has made shopping today easier, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people say that modern technology has made shopping today easier, while others disagree. 72oA
It is undoubtedly true that modern technology has made significant improvements towards daily shopping habits. Whether some people believe that, nowadays it is much more facile to purchase anything due to the innovative latest technology, meanwhile few others totally deny this fact. I believe that the current revolution of technological enhancement definitely makes our way of shopping much easier. In this essay, I will discuss the fact behind their arguments with the relevant example. The factors which support the ideas are first, the greatest invention of the e-commerce platform and cutting-edge online banking system, as well as home delivery services, offer us much relax lifestyle. For instance, in this global pandemic situation due to the widespread of Covid-19 virus in order to make social distance there is nothing more convenient than online shopping. Secondly, because of the electronic platform, there are no physical locations and global boundaries required. Furthermore, the range of product and services are endless. Thirdly, we can be able to compare the price range of the various selection to choose from. Although it has advantages, it also has various impacts that we cannot ignore. The counterarguments can be made that, even though we can see the virtual representation of the products, we cannot justify the quality of the products or services as long as we are having it at our home. Secondly, various marketing agencies always targeted the adolescents by their lucrative offers and discounts which often led young to misuse the money. The best illustration of that is, recently an article published in a daily newspaper that, recently teenage consumers are spending more and more time on various e-commerce websites for the latest trend which led to a serious consequence on their academic performance. In conclusion, considering the above discussion the juvenile often falls into the temptation of exuberance lifestyle and without knowing to harm their future, but if the parents (guardian) give much attention, it can be solved at ease. Besides that, the internet shopping system makes our life so more comfortable and effective that we can be able to concentrate more efficient tasks.
It is
undoubtedly
true that modern technology has made significant improvements towards daily
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shopping
habits. Whether
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some
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people
believe that, nowadays it is
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much
more facile to
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purchase
anything due to the innovative latest technology, meanwhile few others
totally
deny this fact. I believe that the
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current
revolution of technological enhancement definitely
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makes
our way of
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shopping
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much
easier. In this essay, I will discuss the fact behind their arguments with the relevant example.

The factors which support the
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ideas
are
first
, the greatest invention of the e-commerce platform and cutting-edge online banking system,
as well
as home delivery services, offer us
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much
relax lifestyle.
For instance
, in this global pandemic situation due to
The phrase 'the widespread of' is not correct. Use a noun, not an adjective, between 'the' and 'of'.
the widespread of
Covid-19 virus in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
social distance there is nothing more convenient than online
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shopping
.
Secondly
,
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because
of the electronic platform, there are no physical locations and global boundaries required.
Furthermore
, the
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range of product
and services are endless.
Thirdly
, we can be able to compare the price range of the
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various
selection to choose from. Although it has advantages, it
also
has
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various
impacts that we cannot
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ignore
.

The counterarguments can
be made
that,
even though
we can
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see
the virtual representation of the products, we cannot justify the quality of the products or services as long as we are having it at our home.
Secondly
,
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various
marketing agencies always targeted the adolescents by their lucrative offers and discounts which
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
led young to misuse the money. The best illustration of
that is
, recently an article published in a daily newspaper that, recently teenage consumers are spending more and more time on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
various
e-commerce websites for the latest trend which led to a serious consequence on their academic performance.

In conclusion
, considering the above discussion the juvenile
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often
falls into the temptation of exuberance lifestyle and without knowing to harm their future,
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but
if the parents (guardian) give
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much
attention, it can
be solved
at
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ease
.
Besides
that, the internet
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shopping
system
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
our life
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
more comfortable and effective that we can be able to concentrate more efficient tasks.
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IELTS essay Some people say that modern technology has made shopping today easier, while others disagree.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
349 words
6.5
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