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Countries around the world have different educational policies, few aims an career directed approach due to young age of adolescents. This essay argues that even though providing clear paved way for children with limited options, it may act as a facilitator for later life . The later will expose teens to opportunities available for them in different fields. While specific stream orientation may acts as barrier for some children, these have also proved to provide clarity and concrete foundation for later development. Subject specific knowledge will aids learners to evaluate the benefits and consequences of their choice and actions, when deciding to opt for specialization in future educations. For example, study conducted by Hans times in 2004 has suggested that teenagers with higher subject knowledge were able to decide their occupation earlier when compared to other age mates. I believe that adolescents should be allowed to explore, experiment and decide the best option for themse

Countries around the world have different educational policies, few aims an career directed approach due to young age of adolescents. This essay argues that even though providing clear paved way for children with limited options, it may act as a facilitator for later life. The later will expose teens to opportunities available for them in different fields. While specific stream orientation may acts as barrier for some children, these have also proved to provide clarity and concrete foundation for later development. Subject specific knowledge will aids learners to evaluate the benefits and consequences of their choice and actions, when deciding to opt for specialization in future educations. For example, study conducted by Hans times in 2004 has suggested that teenagers with higher subject knowledge were able to decide their occupation earlier when compared to other age mates. I believe that adolescents should be allowed to explore, experiment and decide the best option for themse 5gRm
Countries around the world have different educational policies, few aims an career directed approach due to young age of adolescents. This essay argues that even though providing clear paved way for children with limited options, it may act as a facilitator for later life. The later will expose teens to opportunities available for them in different fields. While specific stream orientation may acts as barrier for some children, these have also proved to provide clarity and concrete foundation for later development. Subject specific knowledge will aids learners to evaluate the benefits and consequences of their choice and actions, when deciding to opt for specialization in future educations. For example, study conducted by Hans times in 2004 has suggested that teenagers with higher subject knowledge were able to decide their occupation earlier when compared to other age mates. I believe that adolescents should be allowed to explore, experiment and decide the best option for themselves. Schools that require learners to select dissimilar courses yearly has helped them to comprehend practical and theoretical aspects. An realistic approach is adapted by these institutions which believes that, ' not everyone is the same'. Every Individual has an unique aptitude and potentiality level. For example, survey conducted by Hyderabad Education System has found that having studied various subjects during secondary education has proved to increase the knowledge-base of people. In conclusion, both the educational systems have their own benefits, that is limited range will guide young adults to a single path. The better choice is multi- subject approach which be an advantage as the person will have an wide spectrum of alternatives
Countries around the world have
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different
educational policies, few aims
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career directed approach due to young age of adolescents. This essay argues that
even though
providing
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clear
paved way for children with limited options, it may act as a facilitator for later life. The later will expose teens to opportunities available for them in
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different
fields.

While specific stream orientation may acts as barrier for
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some
children, these have
also
proved to provide clarity and concrete foundation for later development.
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Subject
specific knowledge will
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aids
learners to evaluate the benefits and consequences of their choice and actions, when deciding to opt for specialization in future educations.
For example
, study conducted by Hans times in 2004 has suggested that
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teenagers
with higher
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subject
knowledge were able to decide their occupation earlier when compared to other age mates.

I believe that adolescents should be
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allowed
to explore, experiment and decide the best option for themselves. Schools that require learners to select dissimilar courses yearly has
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helped
them to comprehend practical and theoretical aspects.
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An
realistic approach
is adapted
by these institutions which believes that,
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'
not everyone is the same'. Every Individual has
Use "a" instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
an
unique aptitude and potentiality level.
For example
, survey conducted by Hyderabad Education System has found that having studied various
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subjects
during secondary education has proved to increase the knowledge-base of
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people
.

In conclusion
, both the educational systems have their
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own
benefits, that
is limited
range will guide young adults to a single path. The better choice is multi-
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
subject
approach which be an advantage as the person will have
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an
wide spectrum of
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alternatives
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IELTS essay Countries around the world have different educational policies, few aims an career directed approach due to young age of adolescents. This essay argues that even though providing clear paved way for children with limited options, it may act as a facilitator for later life. The later will expose teens to opportunities available for them in different fields. While specific stream orientation may acts as barrier for some children, these have also proved to provide clarity and concrete foundation for later development. Subject specific knowledge will aids learners to evaluate the benefits and consequences of their choice and actions, when deciding to opt for specialization in future educations. For example, study conducted by Hans times in 2004 has suggested that teenagers with higher subject knowledge were able to decide their occupation earlier when compared to other age mates. I believe that adolescents should be allowed to explore, experiment and decide the best option for themse

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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