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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothes. Do you agree or disagree? v.23

Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothes. v. 23
In the contemporary world, many people have certainly given a more attention to their appearance. However, some people perceive that to recognise an individual’s tradition and identity would be by their dressing style. I strongly against this view as in the today’s world, most of the people attracted towards a western clothe; as they want to follow the latest trend. The essay will discuss above notion with arguments in the below paragraphs. To begin with, there are many points that proves that an appearance is not used to decide the mythology of an individual. The predominant view is that most of the companies were following uniform for their employees to represent the unity among the staff. Due to this, it would not possible for anyone to judge about their ethics and personality by their clothes. Although, in the materialized world, the people want to acquire the latest trend, this will create a difficulty for a person who wish to wear a various culture clothes everyday having fantasy to follow the modernized world. For example, many American visitors came to India at that time they try to wear the traditional clothes of Indian people and try to enjoy in that manner so, if anyone want to decide the personality of that guy than cloth would not be considered as a crucial factor. Furthermore, the universe has been converted into a small corner due to the globalization. People were travelling to a various nation for an individual’s growth. As a person migrates to a different nation will start to follow that nation’s dressing style to mix with other nation’s local people. Therefore, here also not possible to identify the ethical. At last, people were growing in an independent culture as a result, they have rights to wear the clothes as per their choice. For instance, research conducted shows that people were wearing clothes as per their responsibilities at the job places; base of their work they wear the clothes not as per their culture. In conclusion, most of the people were trying to follow the new-fashioned clothes as they like to appear good. Even based on their job they change their appearance. As per my opinion, it would never be possible to decide one’s culture base on their dressing.
In the contemporary
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people
have
certainly
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given
a more attention to their appearance.
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,
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some
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people
perceive that to
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recognise
an individual’s tradition and identity would be by their dressing style. I
strongly
against this view as in the
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today
’s
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world
, most of the
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people
attracted towards a western
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clothe
; as they want to
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follow
the latest trend. The essay will discuss above notion with arguments in the below paragraphs.

To
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begin
with, there are
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many
points that proves that an appearance is not
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used
to decide the mythology of an individual. The predominant view is that most of the
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companies
were following uniform for their employees to represent the unity among the staff. Due to this, it
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would not possible
for anyone to judge about their ethics and personality by their
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clothes
. Although, in the materialized
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world
, the
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people
want to acquire the latest trend, this will create a difficulty for a person who wish to
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wear
a various culture
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clothes
everyday having fantasy to
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follow
the modernized
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world
.
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,
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many
American visitors came to India at that time they try to
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wear
the traditional
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clothes
of Indian
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people
and try to enjoy in that manner
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so
, if anyone
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want
to decide the personality of that guy than
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cloth
would not
be considered
as a crucial factor.

Furthermore
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been converted
into a
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small
corner due to the globalization.
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People
were travelling to a various
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nation
for an individual’s growth.
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As
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nation
will
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start
to
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follow
that
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nation’s
dressing style to mix with other
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nation’s
local
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people
.
Therefore
, here
also
not possible to identify the ethical. At last,
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people
were growing in an independent culture
as a result
, they have rights to
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wear
the
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clothes
as per their choice.
For instance
, research conducted
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shows
that
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people
were wearing
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clothes
as per their responsibilities
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at the job
places; base of their work they
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wear
the
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clothes
not as per their culture.

In conclusion
, most of the
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people
were trying to
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follow
the new-fashioned
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clothes
as they like to appear
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good
. Even based on their job they
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change
their appearance. As per my opinion, it would never be possible to decide one’s culture base on their dressing.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothes. v. 23

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
377 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 9.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 9.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 9.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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