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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothes. Do you agree or disagree v.22

Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothes. v. 22
Clothes are considered as one of the most essential accessories in individual's physical appearance. Many people believe that they can predict one's culture and nature by the choice of clothes. Personally, I do not fully agree with this stance. It is possible to guess a person's lifestyle and background from clothes. However, it is really difficult to predict one's personality and values by simply looking at dressing. For example, consider a Muslim lady wearing a veil can reveal about her background and connection with her religion but we cannot judge her nature. Similarly, a Sikh wearing a turban can only reveal about his traditions. Entertainers and celebrities normally put shocking colours and jazzy dresses which is an indication of their lifestyles and preferences. Nevertheless, outward appearances can be deceptive sometimes. For instance, a man dressed up in line with the teachings of religion but can defraud innocent followers. Recently, many studies have revealed that most of the cases filed in Pakistan are against self-proclaimed religious saints who were found playing with life of innocent people by getting their attention only by outward looks. Furthermore, young girls in developing countries like India, Pakistan and China are well inclined towards western traditions and keen to dress up like them and adopt western style. In conclusion, dressing sense of a person can only depict his background and traditions, but it is not a true reflection of individual's habits and values which he carries with. So it is advisable to not make an opinion about people with just the clothes they use to wear.
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Clothes
are considered
as one of the most essential accessories in individual's physical appearance.
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Many
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people
believe that they can predict one's culture and nature by the choice of
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clothes
.
Personally
, I do not
fully
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agree
with this stance.

It is possible to guess a person's lifestyle and background from
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clothes
.
However
, it is
really
difficult to predict one's personality and values by
simply
looking at dressing.
For example
, consider a Muslim lady wearing a veil can reveal about her background and connection with her religion
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but
we cannot judge her nature.
Similarly
, a Sikh wearing a turban can
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only
reveal about his traditions. Entertainers and celebrities
normally
put shocking
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colours
and jazzy dresses which is an indication of their lifestyles and preferences.

Nevertheless
, outward appearances can be deceptive
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sometimes
.
For instance
, a
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man
dressed up in line with the teachings of religion
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but
can defraud innocent followers. Recently,
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many
studies have revealed that most of the cases filed in Pakistan are against self-proclaimed religious saints who
were found
playing with life of innocent
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people
by getting their attention
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only
by outward looks.
Furthermore
, young girls in
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developing countries
like India, Pakistan and China are well inclined towards western traditions and keen to dress up like them and adopt western style.

In conclusion
, dressing sense of a person can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
depict his background and traditions,
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but
it is not a true reflection of individual's habits and values which he carries with.
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So
it is advisable to not
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make
an opinion about
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people
with
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just
the
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clothes
they
Make sure that 'use to' is correct. For habitual actions in the past or to mean 'accustomed to', use "used to".
use to
wear.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothes. v. 22

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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