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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Nowadays, parents can learn more from their children than their children can learn from their parents. v.632

Nowadays, parents can learn more from their children than their children can learn from their parents. v. 632
Nowadays, parents and children have been playing significant roles in our daily life. Although there are wildly acknowledged belief that parents can learn more from their children, some people strongly hold that their children can learn more from their parents. In my opinion, I prefer the second idea. In the first place, no one can deny parents have more experiment than their children. In other words, when their children encounter some problem and do not know how to solve them, they could ask their parents and in this way the children will learn the experiment. Take my sister, Alice, as an example. When she went to college, she liked this school but she did not like the subject which she learned. Because she was not good at this mathematics but the mathematics was very important for this subject. She felt very upset and did not know how to solve this problem. Then, she expressed her thought for her parents, and the parents told her she could exchange the subject. So Alice tried her best to study this subject, in the end she got the chance to exchange the subject, she learn a lot experiments from their parents. We can see that It is because of her parents that Alice could know how to solve the problem. So, children could learn a lot of experiment from their parents. In the second place, it is clear that parents love their children. In other words, because the parents love their children, when the children make some mistakes, their parents could help their children and their children will not make the same mistake again. Take my classmate, Tom, as an example. When he went to the college, he liked this subject, but he did not like a teacher who taught his business. Because Tom thought his class is very boring and the teacher did not know how to teacher his students. So Tom decided to do not go to his class. Her parents knew this thing, they told Tom that this behavior was not good for his study and he could ask teacher some question if he did not understand. So, Tom knew his behavior was not good. Then he tried his best to learn this class and got good grade in the final exam. Although there are lots of people think that parents can learn more from their children, I still want to claim that children could learn more from their parents because their parents have more experiments than their children and could help their children when they make mistakes.
Nowadays,
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parents
and
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have been playing significant roles in our daily life. Although there are
wildly
acknowledged belief that
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parents
can
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learn
more from their
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children
,
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some
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people
strongly
hold that their
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children
can
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learn
more from their
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parents
. In my opinion, I prefer the second
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idea
.

In the
first
place, no one can deny
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parents
have more
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experiment
than their
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children
.
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In
other words, when their
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children
encounter
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some
problem and do not
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know
how to solve them, they could ask their
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parents
and in this way the
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children
will
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learn
the
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experiment
. Take my sister, Alice, as an example. When she went to college, she liked this school
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but
she did not like the
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subject
which she learned.
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she was not
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good
at this mathematics
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but
the mathematics was
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very
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important
for this
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subject
. She felt
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very
upset and did not
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know
how to solve this problem. Then, she expressed her
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thought
for her
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parents
, and the
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parents
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told
her she could exchange the
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subject
.
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So
Alice tried her best to study this
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subject
, in the
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end
she
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got
the chance to exchange the
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subject
, she
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learn
a lot
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experiments
from their
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parents
. We can
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see
that It is
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because
of her
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parents
that Alice could
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know
how to solve the problem.
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,
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children
could
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learn
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a lot of
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experiment
from their parents.

In the second place, it is
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clear
that
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parents
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love
their
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children
.
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,
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because
the
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parents
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love
their
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children
, when the
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children
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make
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some
mistakes, their
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parents
could
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help
their
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children
and their
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children
will not
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make
the same mistake again. Take my classmate, Tom, as an example. When he went to the college, he liked this
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subject
,
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but
he did not like a
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teacher
who taught his business.
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Tom
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thought
his
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class
is
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very
boring and the
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teacher
did not
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know
how to
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teacher
his students.
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Tom decided to do not go to his
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class
. Her
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parents
knew this thing, they
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told
Tom that this behavior was not
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good
for his
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study and
he could ask
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teacher
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some
question if he did not understand.
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, Tom knew his behavior was not
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good
. Then he tried his best to
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learn
this
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class
and
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got
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good
grade in the final exam.

Although there are lots of
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people
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think
that
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parents
can
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learn
more from their
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children
, I
still
want to claim that
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children
could
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learn
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parents
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because
their
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parents
have more
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experiments
than their
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children
and could
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help
their
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children
when they
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make
mistakes.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
63Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Nowadays, parents can learn more from their children than their children can learn from their parents. v. 632

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
427 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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