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Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree? v.15

Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. v. 15
It is important to consider the methods of teaching. Some people believe that less time is spent on learning technical skills and too much hours learning facts. This essay agrees that large amount of period is allocated to the studying of theories and less time on proficiencies. To begin with, one reason why huge period is devoted to studying facts is the way that the educational institutions are designed. Too much emphasis is placed on learning hypothesis, especially in developing counties. For example, The Sun recently reported that 95% of graduates from Nigeria had no opportunities to gain expertise while they were in school because of increased course work as the semester progresses. Nonetheless, if they had gained competence, it would not be as a result of the huge course work. Moreover, schools are not equipped with state of the art laboratories. This is one of the reasons why it is more focused on facts. Students who have an interest to learn practical knowledge are left with few opportunities to do so. For instance, The Guardian recently reported that more than 95% of student who showed interest in gaining expertise while in the university had no opportunities to do so because their institutions lacks quality laboratories. Notwithstanding, if standard laboratories had been provided in those institutions, the students would have been able to learn these skills. In conclusion, due to the methods of education and lack of equipments, I believe these are the reasons why much time is spent on learning facts than practical skills.
It is
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important
to consider the methods of teaching.
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Some
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people
believe that less time
is spent
on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
technical
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skills
and too
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much
hours
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
facts. This essay
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agrees
that large amount of period
is allocated
to the studying of theories and less time on proficiencies.

To
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begin
with, one reason why huge period
is devoted
to studying facts is the way that the educational institutions
are designed
. Too much emphasis
is placed
on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
hypothesis,
especially
in developing counties.
For example
, The Sun recently reported that 95% of graduates from Nigeria had no opportunities to gain expertise while they were in school
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of increased course work as the semester progresses. Nonetheless, if they had gained competence, it would not be
as a result
of the huge course work.

Moreover
, schools are not equipped with
Did you mean "state-of-the-art"?
state of the art
laboratories. This is one of the reasons why it is more focused on facts. Students who have an interest to learn practical knowledge are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
with few opportunities to do
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
.
For instance
, The Guardian recently reported that more than 95% of student who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
showed
interest in gaining expertise while in the university had no opportunities to do
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
their institutions lacks quality laboratories. Notwithstanding, if standard laboratories had
been provided
in those institutions, the students would have been able to learn these
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
.

In conclusion
, due to the methods of education and lack of equipments, I believe these are the reasons why much time
is spent
on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
facts than practical
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. v. 15

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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