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Some people say that having a lot of TV channels is good while others argue that it reduces the quality of programs Discuss both views and give your own opinion v.2

Some people say that having a lot of TV channels is good while others argue that it reduces the quality of programs 2
One of the most conspicuous trends of today's world is a colossal upsurge in the number of people who expending much era in their atelier. There is a widespread worry that this will only lead to a myriad of concerns in one's life. However, I do not entirely accept that and I will explain why in this essay. There are a number of arguments in favour of my stance. The most preponderant one is that people usually prefer to allocate their time at work. Thanks to the wide range of advantages it offers, not only can one benefits more when it comes to being effective, but they can also enhance the productivity and quality of their lives with much ease and efficacy. Needless to say, all these merits stand one in good stead as far as augmenting their chances of prosperity and excellence is concerned. Therefore, another pivotal aspect of the aforementioned proposition is that it is only likely to help one thrive and excel in varied areas. Besides, only when following such s system, can they broaden their horizons, thus learning such essential attributes as responsibility and dedication. For instance, my father prefers working rather then spending time with us and he really does hard task only to full-fill our desires. Hence, it is apparent why many are in favour to stay away from their homes and give much second to their trial. In conclusion, moreover people work for their family and it will completely accept to say that expending much generation of industry should not be wrong.
One of the most conspicuous trends of
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today
's world is a colossal upsurge in the number of
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people
who expending
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much
era in their atelier. There is a widespread worry that this will
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only
lead to a myriad of concerns in one's life.
However
, I do not
entirely
accept that and I will
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explain
why in this essay.

There are a number of arguments in
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favour
of my stance. The most preponderant one is that
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people
usually
prefer to allocate their time at work. Thanks to the wide range of advantages it offers, not
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only
can one benefits more when it
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comes
to being effective,
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but
they can
also
enhance the productivity and quality of their
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lives
with
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much
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ease
and efficacy. Needless to say, all these merits stand one in
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good
stead as far as augmenting their chances of prosperity and excellence
is concerned
.

Therefore
, another pivotal aspect of the aforementioned proposition is that it is
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only
likely to
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help
one thrive and excel in varied areas.
Besides
,
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only
when following such s system, can they broaden their horizons,
thus
learning such essential attributes as responsibility and dedication.
For instance
, my father prefers working
rather
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then
spending time with
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us and
he
really
does
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hard
task
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only
to full-fill our desires.
Hence
, it is apparent why
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many
are in
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favour
to stay away from their homes and give
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much
second to their trial.

In conclusion
,
moreover
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people
work for their family and it will completely accept to say that expending
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much
generation of industry should not be
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wrong
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that having a lot of TV channels is good while others argue that it reduces the quality of programs 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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