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Some people say that government should build sports facilities for professional athletes. Others believe that such facilities should be open to everyone. Discuss both views with your opinion.

Some people say that government should build sports facilities for professional athletes. Others believe that such facilities should be open to everyone. 8Qn2B
It is opined by few individuals that authority ought to establish sports amenities for professional participants, while others think that such facilities should allow using everyone. Although it is a wise idea to increase revenue from the sports sector. In my opinion, everyone has an equal right to get amenities. On the other hand, it is indisputable that the state should avail sports facilities for professional athletes as they can improve their talents by using proper equipment. Even sometimes, they could not afford expensive tools which are necessary for doing practice. Thus, it is a good notion to provide better sports equipment to athletes and by doing this government can create more revenue as it will be helpful for the nation to improve the economy. For example, a survey conducted by the Times of India reveals that the government of Gujarat has built plenty of sports centres for professional participants and it helps the authority to raise revenue from the sports sector. However, it would hurt the local people of the community. On the other hand, providing modern sports amenities to sportsperson plays an essential role in this modern era, but every people of the nation have a similar right to get any kind of government facilities. Because people have paid taxes from their income to the authority. so, they also expect the authority that they receive a reward for paying taxes. if the government does not provide facilities to all citizens, then it will have a detrimental effect on society. Therefore, authorities should avail sports facilities for all the denizens of the nation. to illustrate better it is reported by BBC that the USA has provided similar sports facilities to all the citizens as common people can improve their skills related to the sports field. In conclusion, despite government ought to avail sports amenities to sportsperson as it is a good initiative to raise the income from the sports sector. In my perception, every people have the same right to obtain sports facilities as they pay taxes to the state each year.
It
is opined
by few individuals that
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authority
ought to establish
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sports
amenities for professional participants, while others
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think
that such facilities should
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allow
using everyone.
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Although
it is a wise
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idea
to increase revenue from the
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sports
sector. In my opinion, everyone has an equal right to
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get
amenities.

On the other hand
, it is indisputable that the state should avail
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sports
facilities for professional athletes as they can
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improve
their talents by using proper equipment. Even
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sometimes
, they could not afford expensive tools which are necessary for doing practice.
Thus
, it is a
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good
notion to provide better
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sports
equipment to athletes and by doing this
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government
can create more revenue as it will be helpful for the nation to
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improve
the economy.
For example
, a survey conducted by
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the Times of India
reveals that the
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government
of Gujarat has built
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plenty
of
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sports
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centres
for professional participants and it
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helps
the
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authority
to raise revenue from the
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sports
sector.
However
, it would hurt the local
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people
of the community.

On the other hand
, providing modern
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sports
amenities to sportsperson plays an essential role in this modern era,
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but
every
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people
of the nation have a similar right to
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get
any kind of
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government
facilities.
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Because
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people
have paid taxes from their income to the
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authority
.
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so
, they
also
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expect
the
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authority
that they receive a reward for paying taxes.
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if
the
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government
does not provide facilities to all citizens, then it will have a detrimental effect on society.
Therefore
,
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authorities
should avail
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sports
facilities for all the denizens of the nation.
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to
illustrate better it
is reported
by BBC that the USA has provided similar
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sports
facilities to all the citizens as common
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people
can
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improve
their
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skills
related to the
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sports
field.

In conclusion
, despite
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government
ought to avail
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sports
amenities to sportsperson as it is a
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good
initiative to raise the income from the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sports
sector. In my perception, every
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
have the same right to obtain
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sports
facilities as they pay taxes to the state each year.

IELTS essay Some people say that government should build sports facilities for professional athletes. Others believe that such facilities should be open to everyone.

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343 words
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