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Some people say that excessive use of mobile phones and computers badly affects teenagers' writing and reading skills. Do you agree or disagree with the statement? Give your opinion. v.2

Some people say that excessive use of mobile phones and computers badly affects teenagers' writing and reading skills. Give your opinion. v. 2
Some people believe public fundings should be spent on railways, others think this should be spent on roads. In this essay I will explain the reasons why I agree with this statement. Investing in railways is essential as trains are a more convenient means of transport. Take, for example, one train only is needed to carry thousands of passengers to work, meanwhile, private cars are used by one or two people at a time, increasing the traffic noticeably. Another advantage of trains is the short time it takes to arrive downtown. For instance, in Buenos Aires it would take maybe one hour driving in heavy traffic to get to work neighbouring areas such as Vicente Lopez, whereas by train you would only need 15 to 20 minutes. On the other hand, those who think money should be spent on roads argue that cars can reach places that trains do not. The province of Misiones, in Argentina, is one clear example of this, there, trains have not arrived ever. In spite of this, trains are more environmentally friendly than cars owing to the small amount fumes they emit. To illustrate, the contamination emitted by one car in a 30 kilometre trip equals to 400 kilometres of train ride. In conclusion, whereas roads should be built and looked after by the government to reach far away cities, in my opinion, more money should be spent on building railways and trains as these are fast, convenient and environmentally friendly. Moreover, politicians should always bear in mind ecological and practical aspects to decide where to spend money.
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believe public
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should be
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spent
on railways, others
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think
this should be
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spent
on roads. In this essay I will
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explain
the reasons why I
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agree
with this statement.

Investing in railways is essential as
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trains
are a more convenient means of transport. Take,
for example
, one
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train
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only
is needed
to carry thousands of passengers to work, meanwhile, private
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cars
are
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used
by one or two
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people
at a time, increasing the traffic
noticeably
. Another advantage of
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trains
is the short time it takes to arrive downtown.
For instance
, in Buenos Aires it would take maybe one hour driving in heavy traffic to
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get
to work
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neighbouring
areas such as Vicente Lopez, whereas by
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train
you would
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only
need 15 to 20 minutes.

On the other hand
, those who
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think
money should be
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spent
on roads argue that
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cars
can reach places that
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trains
do not. The province of
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Misiones
, in Argentina, is one
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clear
example of this, there,
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trains
have not arrived ever.
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this,
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trains
are more
environmentally
friendly than
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cars
owing to the
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small
amount fumes they emit. To illustrate, the contamination emitted by one
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car
in a 30
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kilometre
trip equals to 400
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kilometres
of
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train
ride.

In conclusion
, whereas roads should
be built
and looked after by the
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government
to reach far away cities, in my opinion, more money should be
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spent
on building railways and
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trains
as these are
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fast
, convenient and
environmentally
friendly.
Moreover
, politicians should always bear in mind ecological and practical aspects to decide where to spend money.
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IELTS essay Some people say that excessive use of mobile phones and computers badly affects teenagers' writing and reading skills. Give your opinion. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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