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Some people say that economic growth is the only way to end hunger and poverty, while others say that economic growth is damaging the environment so it should be stopped. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.10

Some people say that economic growth is the only way to end hunger and poverty, while others say that economic growth is damaging the environment so it should be stopped. v. 10
It is believed that the economic development is the solution to end the hunger and poverty, whereas the development of economic should be stopped due to the harmful effects it has on the environment. In my point of view, both view sides will have its benefits and drawbacks. In this essay, I will discuss both arguments. On the one hand, the economic development brings a significant number of effective measures to tackle the hunger and poverty population. To begin with, a good economy will create more job opportunities for those who has a low income of the homeless people, and so on. Besides, creating employment opportunities will ensure the stable income for those kinds of people, it would lead to the decline of the crime’s proportion, so the residents’ life in a country would be better. Moreover, again sting the hunger, the government should invest the money in the agriculture industry. For example, when the agriculture uses the modern technology like automatic machine, the productivity will be boosted and increased the food production, so the percentage of hunger will be dramatically decreased. On the other hand, stopping the economic growth is an ideal because the growth of the economy has affected negatively on the environment. As the development of economics, a substantial number of factories are built which is the main reason that affect the environment. For example, the large amount of carbon dioxide emits every day from those factories which leads to the climate changes and badly damage the flora and fauna. More factories, the greenhouse gas will be increased lead in the global and threatened the human’s life and loss the natural habitat. To sum up, although development of the economy brings many benefits to the residents in a country, it will damage the natural life and citizens’ life quality. In my view side, I think the government would find a good way to balance the growing economic and natural habitat.
It
is believed
that the
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economic
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development
is the solution to
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end
the
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hunger
and poverty, whereas the
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development
of
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economic
should be
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stopped
due to the harmful effects it has on the environment. In my point of view, both view sides will have its benefits and drawbacks. In this essay, I will discuss both arguments.

On the one hand, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
economic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
development
brings a significant number of effective measures to tackle the
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hunger
and poverty population. To
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begin
with, a
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good
economy will create more job opportunities for those who has a low income of the homeless
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people
, and
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so
on.
Besides
, creating employment opportunities will ensure the stable income for those kinds of
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people
, it would lead to the decline of the crime’s proportion,
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so
the residents’
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life
in a country would be better.
Moreover
, again sting the
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hunger
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should invest the money in the agriculture industry.
For example
, when the agriculture
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
uses
the modern technology like automatic machine, the productivity will
be boosted
and increased the food production,
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so
the percentage of
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hunger
will be
dramatically
decreased.

On the other hand
, stopping the
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economic
growth is an ideal
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because
the growth of the economy has
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affected
negatively
on the environment. As the
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development
of
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economics
, a substantial number of factories
are built
which is the main reason that affect the environment.
For example
, the large amount of carbon dioxide emits every day from those factories which leads to the climate
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
and
badly
damage the flora and fauna. More factories, the greenhouse gas will
be increased
lead in the global and threatened the human’s
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life
and loss the natural habitat.

To sum up, although
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development
of the economy brings
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many
benefits to the residents in a country, it will damage the natural
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life
and citizens’
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life
quality. In my view side, I
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think
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
would find a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
way to balance the growing
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economic
and natural habitat.
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IELTS essay Some people say that economic growth is the only way to end hunger and poverty, while others say that economic growth is damaging the environment so it should be stopped. v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
323 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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