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Some people say that Ebooks and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines to what extent do you agree or disagree. v.2

Some people say that Ebooks and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines v. 2
Over the period of time, latest technology is being used in almost all industries to make processes easy and cheap. Few people believe that digital books and modern technology will vanish the use of print media and magazines. As digitization has a big impact on print media, to a certain extent I agree that ebooks will replace the traditional newspapers and magazines. This essay agrees that digital technology will completely replace the use of papers for news and articles. There is a big impact of digital technology like the internet and smart phones in our day to day life. So it is really easy to get any of the latest news or magazines in our smartphones from any part of the world with the help of internet whereas newspaper or magazines may not be available everywhere. Sometimes it is possible to get regional newspapers from other countries. For instance, migrated people who live in the other part of the world can read newspapers or magazines in their regional language. Moreover, digital media has its environmental advantage as well. Use of ebooks will reduce the amount of trees being cut to produce papers for newspapers and magazines. In addition to that, modern technology enables fast access of any of the articles. People can read any of the article or news anytime with the help of internet. However, over use of any of the digital technology is harmful for health. Since the digital screen is required to use any of the ebook, it harms our eyes and sometimes by looking at the screen constantly at screen people feel uncomfortable. In conclusion, as every latest thing has their own pros and cons, ebooks and modern technology has also. It will reduce the use of paper, but not completely as per my opinion.
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make
processes easy and
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cheap
. Few
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people
believe that digital books and modern
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technology
will vanish the
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use
of print media and
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magazines
. As digitization has a
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big
impact on print media, to a certain extent I
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agree
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ebooks
will replace the traditional
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newspapers
and
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magazines
. This essay
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agrees
that digital
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technology
will completely replace the
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use
of papers for news and articles.

There is a
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big
impact of digital
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technology
like the internet and smart phones in our
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day to day
life.
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it is
really
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get
any of the latest news or
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magazines
in our smartphones from any part of the world with the
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help
of internet whereas
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newspaper
or
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magazines
may not be available everywhere.
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Sometimes
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regional
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newspapers
from other countries.
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, migrated
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people
who
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live
in the other part of the world can read
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newspapers
or
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magazines
in their regional language.

Moreover
, digital media has its environmental advantage
as well
.
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ebooks
will
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reduce
the amount of trees being
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cut
to produce papers for
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newspapers
and
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magazines
.
In addition
to that, modern
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technology
enables
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fast
access
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of any of
the articles.
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can read any of the article or news anytime with the
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help
of internet.

However
, over
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use
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of any of
the digital
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technology
is harmful for health. Since the digital screen
is required
to
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use
any of the
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ebook
, it harms our eyes and
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sometimes
by looking at the screen
constantly
at screen
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people
feel uncomfortable.

In conclusion
, as every latest thing has their
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own
pros and cons,
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ebooks
and modern
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technology
has
also
. It will
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reduce
the
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use
of paper,
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but
not completely as per my opinion.
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22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people say that Ebooks and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
299 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
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    Present relevant ideas
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