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Some people say that E- books and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines to what extent do you agree or disagree. v.7

Some people say that E- books and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines v. 7
These days, some people argue that traditional newspapers and magazines would be completely replaced by electronic books and other latest technology. However, I mainly disagree with this statement. Paper books would not be abolished because of the advantages in archiving. It is clear that the paper book is a substance, so it has an advantage in preserving. In other words, contents in modern technology such as e-books are just data so it will have a risk of disappearing in the future. For one thing, the magazines always play a major role in generating the trend and fashion. Fashion trends have been changing quickly in all past periods. If people want to study the history of fashion, researching old magazines would be the best choice. Accordingly, archiving the magazines are essential for cultivating human history. On the other hand, e-books and other internet contents are much more convenient and are in accordance with modern life. It is true that nowadays, most people choose to read news on the internet rather than traditional newspaper. In Japan, the circulation of newspapers has significantly decreased in the last 10 years. That is because people’s activity has been changing with the development of smartphones and reading news on the smartphone would fit more their lifestyles. It can be said that the circulation of newspapers would continue to be in decline and the electronic articles would be on the increase the share in the near future. In conclusion, although the share of e-books and other computer-based contents will continue growing, I believe that traditional-style magazines will not be replaced by e-books.
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some
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argue that traditional
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newspapers
and
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magazines
would be completely replaced by electronic books and
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other
latest technology.
However
, I
mainly
disagree with this statement.

Paper books would not
be abolished
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because
of the advantages in archiving. It is
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clear
that the paper book is a substance,
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so
it has an advantage in preserving. In
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other
words, contents in modern technology such as e-books are
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just
data
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so
it will have a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
of disappearing in the future. For one thing, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
magazines
always play a major role in generating the trend and fashion. Fashion trends have been changing
quickly
in all past periods. If
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
want to study the history of fashion, researching
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
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magazines
would be the best choice.
Accordingly
, archiving the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
magazines
are essential for cultivating human history.

On the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
hand, e-books and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
internet contents are much more convenient and are in accordance with modern life. It is true that nowadays, most
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
choose to read news on the internet
rather
than traditional
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
newspaper
. In Japan, the circulation of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
newspapers
has
significantly
decreased in the last 10 years.
That is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people’s
activity has been changing with the development of smartphones and reading news on the smartphone would fit more their lifestyles. It can
be said
that the circulation of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
newspapers
would continue to be in decline and the electronic articles would be on the increase the share in the near future.

In conclusion
, although the share of e-books and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
computer-based contents will continue growing, I believe that traditional-style
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
magazines
will not
be replaced
by e-books.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that E- books and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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