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Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. You should write at least 2 v.8

Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. You should write at least 2 v. 8
A growing number of people believe that computer machines exert significant positive impacts on human lives, whereas the critics of computer claim that it creates high stress in the daily activities of human beings. However, in my opinion, while I believe that computer technology has brought successfully revolutions, I agree that this type of modern technology has aroused considerable anxiety and stress in a large proportion of people. On the one hand, we can say beyond any dilemma that these appliances often lead to addictions to public and pose serious health issues. To put it in another way, the majority of them have excessive dependence, which is even considered higher than alcohol and smoking addictions. To illustrate, pupils are usually found spending excessive time on computers owing to the countless source of entertainments and they often lack outdoor activities. As a result, there are higher possibilities of growing lazy that often result to chronic diseases such as obesity, fatty liver and even cancer. However, I would argue that the positive influence is even higher than any negatives. It has made possible for people to work from home because of which many workers are spending happy life. To demonstrate, they can avoid travelling to a work place for long distances, which would otherwise cost huge sums of money for the petrol and diesel. Not only could they save money but also they would finish their household tasks such as assisting their family members in cleaning, washing and the rest others. So, there can be no doubt that people can benefit completely from computer technology. Over and above that, another important impact is the online activities which have brought tremendous revolutions in our life. In other words, payments, transfer of money and shopping can be done readily even though you are having chat in the cafe, travelling in a overcrowded train and watching movies. In no time, the shopping products will be on the doorway, the money will have been received already and so on. Imagine, going to a bank carrying a bag of money to make payment and transfer, it cannot be denied that you might be attacked, robbed and even killed by the burglars and violent criminals. So there can be no doubt that it has lead the life easy, exciting and peaceful. In conclusion, although there are drawbacks such as health problems and addictions, personally, I believe benefits in terms of healthy and convenient life outweigh any negative effects.
A growing number of
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people
believe that computer machines exert significant
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positive
impacts on human
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lives
, whereas the critics of computer claim that it creates high
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stress
in the daily activities of human beings.
However
, in my opinion, while I believe that computer technology has brought
successfully
revolutions, I
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agree
that this type of modern technology has aroused considerable anxiety and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
in a large proportion of
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people
.

On the one hand, we can say beyond any dilemma that these appliances
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often
lead to addictions to public and pose serious health issues. To put it in another way, the majority of them have excessive dependence, which is even considered higher than alcohol and smoking addictions. To illustrate, pupils are
usually
found spending excessive time on computers owing to the countless source of
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
entertainments and
they
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
lack outdoor activities.
As a result
, there are higher possibilities of growing lazy that
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often
result to chronic diseases such as obesity, fatty liver and even cancer.

However
, I would argue that the
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positive
influence is even higher than any negatives. It has made possible for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to work from home
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because
of which
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many
workers are spending happy
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life
. To demonstrate, they can avoid travelling to a work place for long distances, which would
otherwise
cost huge sums of
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money
for the petrol and diesel. Not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
could they save
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money
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but
also
they would finish their household tasks such as assisting their family members in cleaning, washing and the rest others.
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So
, there can be no doubt that
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people
can benefit completely from computer technology.

Over and above that, another
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important
impact is the online activities which have brought tremendous revolutions in our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
.
In other words
, payments, transfer of
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money
and shopping can
be done
readily
even though
you are having chat in the
'cafe' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "café"
cafe
, travelling in
Use "an" instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
a
overcrowded train and watching movies. In no time, the shopping products will be on the doorway, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
will have
been received
already and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
on. Imagine, going to a bank carrying a bag of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
payment and transfer, it cannot
be denied
that you might
be attacked
, robbed and even killed by the burglars and violent criminals.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
there can be no doubt that it has lead the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
easy, exciting and peaceful.

In conclusion
, although there are drawbacks such as health problems and addictions,
personally
, I believe benefits in terms of healthy and convenient
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life
outweigh any
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
effects.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. You should write at least 2 v. 8

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
410 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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