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some people say that computer skills should be added to primary subjects in elementary school such as reading, writing, and mat. How far you agree or disagree?

some people say that computer skills should be added to primary subjects in elementary school such as reading, writing, and mat. How far you agree or disagree? XL9P
Nowdays, computer has infiltrate to our lives. From very young age have skills in computer, which I think this will be disastrous for a kid taking into consideration that by adding computer class this will be exaggerated. Kids in tender ages need to play with their friends outside at the park for example. If they learn how to use computer from early, then they will deny to leave it to go outside at the park and play with their coevals. This situation is gonna be a disaster and depression will increase in cases. Furthermore, introducing computer as a main subject in schools means that automatically creative classes as art, music are being sacrificed. The art classes are very important for a child edification, by their imagination. Through drawing for example, the feeling that you get is freedom. Some people claim also that if you let a child in frond of screen for many hours, in the feature they will have issues with their eyes and this is one of the reason that the lasts years the number of the children with glasses are increased. In conclusion, I believe that the inclusion of computer skills at primary school is a mistake. We have to let the children to focus on the main subjects enjoying their childhood with their friends.
Nowdays
, computer has
infiltrate
to our
lives
. From
very
young age have
skills
in computer, which I
think
this will be disastrous for a kid taking into consideration that by adding computer
class
this will
be exaggerated
. Kids in tender ages need to play with their friends outside at the park
for example
. If they learn how to
use
computer from early, then they will deny to
leave
it to go outside at the park and play with their coevals. This situation is
gonna
be a disaster and depression will increase in cases.

Furthermore
, introducing computer as a main subject in schools means that
automatically
creative classes as art, music are
being sacrificed
. The art classes are
very
important
for a child edification, by their imagination. Through drawing
for example
, the feeling that you
get
is freedom.

Some
people
claim
also
that if you
let
a child in frond of screen for
many
hours, in the feature they will have issues with their eyes and this is one of the reason that the lasts years the number of the children with glasses
are increased
.

In conclusion
, I believe that the inclusion of computer
skills
at primary school is a mistake. We
have to
let
the children to focus on the main subjects enjoying their childhood with their friends.
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IELTS essay some people say that computer skills should be added to primary subjects in elementary school such as reading, writing, and mat. How far you agree or disagree?

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