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Some people say that all High schools and primary school student should we e guide how to manage money as it is an important

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Undoubtedly, in this contemporary scenario money is paramount part our life to fulfill basic needs several months is a point that all subsidy entries and higher school people should be guided how to manage cash as it is an essential I fully agree with this notion and the this as a wood shed light on the valid standpoint in the upcoming paragraph to begin with Alpha of reasons are associated with this statement from which first and foremost learning how to manage money in high school is extremely good for children's future in addition to it is there if they learn underage they will be able to manage their money properly and expects a mentally s is a that do not demand in order to costly things to examplify our search Oxford University state that poor person do not feel full of costly demand due to this youngster do not understand parents condition. on the flip side although there are many reasons but its relative you cannot be ignored firstly they can use burden of their parents for example of according to survey can we many faceted that if children learn about how to make money it will not only be good for their life but also complaining benefits for parents to conclude from given aforementioned information it is evident that money managing I will assist them to control their spending and make better budge.
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managing I will assist them to control their spending and
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IELTS essay Some people say that all High schools and primary school student should we e guide how to manage money as it is an important

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
235 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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