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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Ke03
It is a fact that the primary goal of advertisement is to sell. For some people, it serves its purpose by encouraging them to buy featured products. On the other hand, there are those who do not give any importance to advertisements due to it being very common nowadays. Adverts are effective because of its eye-catching presentations that may connect with consumers emotionally or mentally. Ads can be seen lately not only on billboards or pamphlets but also online wherein designs for both can be enticing. In addition, advertisements feature famous celebrities which is a huge aid in marketing a product. Seeing a person being looked up to on billboards or websites will most likely engage someone’s focus towards the advertisement in print or online. People will have the inkling to purchase the same products promoted by these famous people does. On the other hand, some people believe that advertisements have become a nuisance. Some products are being promoted repeatedly in different mediums like emails or messafes to mobile phones. To exemplify, ads that send messages to our phones and emails several times a day will end up being erased because it occupies a huge memory space in our gadgets. Another reason is because of a person’s poor economic status. Those who are financially incapable of availing any product even those that would benefit them will give no importance to any kind of advertisement. Since purchasing anything involves money, some people will just go on their day without minding any adverts. In conclusion, there are people who see ads as nuisance and their finanancial status deter them from minding any advertisments. However, I still believe that advertisements play a crucial role in convincing people to obtain a product. It is through creative presentations and use of popular artists that makes selling a success.
It is a fact that the primary goal of
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advertisement
is to sell. For
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some
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people
, it serves its purpose by encouraging them to
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buy
featured
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products
.
On the other hand
, there are those who do not give any importance to
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advertisements
due to it being
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very
common nowadays.

Adverts are effective
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because
of its eye-catching presentations that may connect with consumers
emotionally
or mentally. Ads can be
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seen
lately not
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only
on billboards or pamphlets
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but
also
online wherein designs for both can be enticing.
In addition
,
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advertisements
feature
Consider using "celebrities".
famous celebrities


which is a huge aid in marketing a
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product
. Seeing a person
being looked
up to on billboards or websites will most likely engage someone’s focus towards the
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advertisement
in print or online.
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People
will have the inkling to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
the same
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products
promoted by these
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famous
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people
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does
.

On the other hand
,
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some
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people
believe that
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advertisements
have become a nuisance.
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Some
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products
are
being promoted
repeatedly
in
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different
mediums like emails or
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messafes
to mobile phones. To

exemplify, ads that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
messages to our phones and emails several times a day will
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end
up
being erased
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because
it occupies a huge memory space in our gadgets. Another reason is
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because
of a person’s poor economic status. Those who are
financially
incapable of availing any
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product
even those that would benefit them will give no importance to any kind of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisement
. Since purchasing anything involves money,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
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people
will
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just
go on their day without minding any adverts.

In conclusion
, there are
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people
who
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see
ads as nuisance and their
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finanancial
status deter them from minding any
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advertisments
.
However
, I
still
believe that
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advertisements
play a crucial role in convincing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to obtain a
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product
. It is through creative presentations and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of popular artists that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
selling a success.
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IELTS essay Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
5.5
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