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Some offenders commit more crimes after serving the first punishment. Why is this happening, and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem? You should write at least 250 words.

Some offenders commit more crimes after serving the first punishment. Why is this happening, and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem? dBrX
Generally, it is seen that criminals repeat unlawful activities after completing a prime sentence. Numerous factors are responsible for these repeated criminal activities. Let's take a look at several factors at play here and step to rectify this issue. Firstly, Social stigma is the most impacting factor that affects the culprit in many ways. It not only promotes discrimination but also, distinguishes them from other members of society. Secondly, offenders lack emotional and financial support. Delinquents do not get adequate job opportunities due to their past records, which push them toward poverty. At the end of the day, it automatically led them toward more crimes for earning bread. Due to lacking emotional support from near ones and society, these offenders don't think much about committing something unlawful with horrendous results. The need of an hour is to take necessary steps to avoid the situation of repeated crimes among offenders. When it comes to imposing inevitable stress on the steps taken to tackle the problem of increased criminal tendencies of offenders, the most effective way is to provide support to these people in all possible ways. The first step is Government should responsibly provide adequate jobs to released criminals according to their qualifications so that these people may earn for themselves. Furthermore, spreading awareness among people to make them realize the hardships offenders go through after being released from jail so that, they may become emphasize and more accepting toward these people. To conclude, first-time offenders after serving their time fall for yet other crimes due to lack of social stigma, financial and emotional support. Steps like providing job opportunities and spreading awareness among society may help to reduce these recurrent evils and provides a chance to first time offends to be a Nobel citizen again.
Generally
, it is
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seen
that
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criminals
repeat unlawful activities after completing a prime sentence. Numerous factors are responsible for these repeated
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criminal
activities.
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Let
's take a look at several factors at play here and
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step
to rectify this issue.

Firstly
, Social stigma is the most impacting factor that affects the culprit in
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many
ways. It not
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only
promotes discrimination
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but
also
, distinguishes them from other members of society.
Secondly
,
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offenders
lack emotional and financial
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support
. Delinquents do not
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get
adequate job opportunities due to their past records, which push them toward poverty. At the
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end
of the day, it
automatically
led them toward more crimes for earning bread. Due to lacking emotional
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support
from near ones and society, these
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offenders
don't
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think
much about committing something unlawful with horrendous results. The need of an hour is to take necessary
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steps
to avoid the situation of repeated crimes among offenders.

When it
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comes
to imposing inevitable
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stress
on the
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steps
taken to tackle the problem of increased
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criminal
tendencies of
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offenders
, the most effective way is to provide
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support
to these
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people
in all possible ways. The
first
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step
is
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Government
should
responsibly
provide adequate jobs to released
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criminals
according to their qualifications
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so
that these
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people
may earn for themselves.
Furthermore
, spreading awareness among
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people
to
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make
them realize the hardships
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offenders
go through after
being released
from jail
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so
that, they may become emphasize and more accepting toward these
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people
.

To conclude
,
first
-time
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offenders
after serving their time fall for
yet
other crimes due to lack of social stigma, financial and emotional
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support
.
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Steps
like providing job opportunities and spreading awareness among society may
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help
to
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reduce
these recurrent evils and provides a chance to
first
time offends to be a Nobel citizen again.
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IELTS essay Some offenders commit more crimes after serving the first punishment. Why is this happening, and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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