Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? v.37

Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? v. 37
Adverts have become one of the most important modes of communication between the Corporate and Consumers, to let the latter know about new products, discounts and offers. While some argue that adverts are value adding, others see them as merely a push to make buyers purchase unwanted things. I strongly believe that advertisements improve the lives of people and this essay will support my opinion with relevant evidences. Firstly, let us understand how businesses work, in order to infer the role of publicity. A company invests into the research and development of new products; these products then undergo various marketing studies and analysis to determine the packaging, pricing, quality standards, etc. , before finally reaching the market for sale. All the efforts put in by the company so far, will come to fruition, only upon the consumers seeing the value in the offering and purchasing it. For example, Pepsi, the cool drink, was able to compete with a well-known brand, Coca Cola, and establish a brand for itself among the public, mainly through publicizing. Therefore, adverts play a key role in informing the public on the availability of a product in the market and aiding them in procuring the same. Secondly, advertisement acts as a voice of the businesses. When a business leader opts for a deep-discount sale to reduce his ageing inventory, how does he intimate the same to his target purchasers? It is possible only through ads. The instances of achieving sales without ads are very rare and nearly impossible. For instance, in a small community, where everyone knows one another, say someone starts a bakery, it is possible to achieve sales without adverts. However, while targeting a larger audience, adverts become an essential component in running the business. In conclusion, it can be inferred that advertisement acts as a primary mode of interaction between the producers and buyers. Therefore, adverts are irreplaceable and essential for informing the people, of innovations that may affect their lives positively. It is recommended that the quality and frequency of ads are maintained in such a way that the information passed on, is educational and entertaining, rather than annoying and pushing.
Adverts have become one of the most
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
modes of communication between the Corporate and Consumers, to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
the latter know about new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
, discounts and offers. While
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
argue that adverts are value adding, others
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
them as
merely
a push to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
buyers
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
unwanted things. I
strongly
believe that advertisements
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
and this essay will support my opinion with relevant evidences.

Firstly
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
us understand how businesses work, in order to infer the role of publicity. A
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
invests into the research and development of new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
; these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
then undergo various marketing studies and analysis to determine the packaging, pricing, quality standards, etc.
Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
finally
reaching the market for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sale
. All the efforts put in by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
far, will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
to fruition,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
upon the consumers seeing the value in the offering and purchasing it.
For example
, Pepsi, the cool drink, was able to compete with a well-known brand, Coca Cola, and establish a brand for itself among the public,
mainly
through publicizing.
Therefore
, adverts play a key role in informing the public on the availability of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
product
in the market and aiding them in procuring the same.

Secondly
, advertisement acts as a voice of the businesses. When a business leader opts for a deep-discount
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sale
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
his
Possible spelling mistake. 'ageing' is British English.
ageing
inventory, how does he intimate the same to his target purchasers? It is possible
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
through ads. The instances of achieving
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sales
without ads are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
rare and
nearly
impossible.
For instance
, in a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
community, where everyone knows one another, say someone
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
starts
a bakery, it is possible to achieve
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sales
without adverts.
However
, while targeting a larger audience, adverts become an essential component in running the business.

In conclusion
, it can
be inferred
that advertisement acts as a primary mode of interaction between the producers and buyers.
Therefore
, adverts are irreplaceable and essential for informing the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
, of innovations that may affect their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
positively
. It
is recommended
that the quality and frequency of ads
are maintained
in such a way that the information passed on, is educational and entertaining,
rather
than annoying and pushing.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? v. 37

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
359 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts