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some people say that advertising encourage us to buy things that we really donot need.Others say that advertisements tell us about new things that may improve our life

Media is one of the very common sources to share and spread the news. There is no shadow of a doubt that Advertisement on Media promotes product sale. There currently exists a hot debate that whether the advertisement is good for the public or not. Firstly, publishing ads on the newspaper, TV channels and social media is good for awareness of the common lay man. In this modern era, we are able to know about more things as were in Past. It is a plausible step as it provide awarness to everyone about technology and advancement in science. Every one has right on the comforts of life. If some one wants to buy items more than ones basic needs one can. It depends upon the finbancial stability rather than unawarness. It can be examplified as I have bought a refrigerator 10 years back and now when I saw add of New refrigerator which consume less electricity and can store better and keep itself odorless I immediately booked my order and purchased it. There is a school of thought who suggest that advertisement promote the people to waste their money as they start buying items not required by them. Some of the people even buy new items by looking at the new technologies. This group concerns that compnies are making new model only for their sale it is totally wastage of money. i also wasted alot of money buying csmetics. To encapsulate, it can be concluded although proponents are in notion that advertisemnet is not good I vehementy gain say with the above assertion that advertisement is guiding us about new inventions.
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. There is no shadow of a doubt that
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currently
exists a hot debate that whether the
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advertisement
is
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for the public or not.

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good
for awareness of the common lay
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. In this modern era, we are able to know about more things as were in Past. It is a plausible step as it provide awarness to everyone about technology and advancement in science. Every one has right on the comforts of life. If
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one wants to
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items more than ones basic needs one can. It depends upon the finbancial stability
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a refrigerator 10 years back and
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refrigerator which consume less electricity and can store better and
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keep
itself odorless I immediately booked my order and
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purchased
it.

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who suggest that
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promote the
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to waste their money as they
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buying items not required by them.
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even
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new
items by looking at the
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technologies. This group concerns that compnies are making
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new
model
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only
for their sale it is
totally
wastage of money. i
also
wasted alot of money buying csmetics.

To encapsulate, it can
be concluded
although proponents are in notion that advertisemnet is not
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good
I vehementy gain say with the above assertion that
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advertisement
is guiding us about
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new
inventions.

IELTS essay some people say that advertising encourage us to buy things that we really donot need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new things that may improve our life

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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