Search
Tools
Listening
Reading
1. Academic
2. General
Writing
1. IELTSWriting Checker
2. IELTS Writing Samples
Speaking

Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.

"Some people say that advertisements make us buy things we do not need in our daily lives?" To what extent do you agree to this statement?

"Some people say that advertisements make us buy things we do not need in our daily lives? " qQVqd

It is often said that people purchase unnecessary goods through advertisements. I believe that these days, all ages people are more dependent on social media and modify their thinking processes. Firstly, in the modern era, publicity plays a vital role to encourage people to buy the product whether it is important in their life or useless. For instance, if anyone survey this particular work then the result would be that 99% of the young generation are engaged with these activities. Another important argument is that people buy commodities only because of packaging. Even sellers advertise their products that anyone can be paid for without thinking. That is the marketing strategy to keep their customers and to establish trust between them. In addition, some groups of young people especially those who are a teenager they do not understand what is needed to their everyday life so that shoppers are easily diverted to their minds. They depend on social networking services, particularly Facebook where the live program is organized in a glamorous way so that people can buy their product. In conclusion, for saving time, people buy unimportant products which do not exist in their everyday lives. Government should take the step for this type of ad issue and ensure a rich world heritage for future generations.

It is This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:frequently
often
 said that You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
purchase
 unnecessary This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :productscommoditiesmerchandises
goods
 through advertisements. I believe that these days, all ages You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 are more dependent on social media and modify their thinking processes.

Firstly
, in the modern era, publicity plays a vital role to encourage You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 to You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpurchasebargainacquisitioninvestment
buy
 the product whether it is This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:vitalcriticalessential
important
 in their life or useless. For instance
, if anyone The pronoun 'anyone' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "surveys", "surveyed".surveyssurveyed
survey
 this particular work then the result would be that 99% of the young generation are engaged
 with these activities.

Another This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:vitalcriticalessential
important
 argument is that You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpurchasebargainacquisitioninvestment
buy
 commodities This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 of packaging. Even sellers advertise their products that anyone can be paid
 for without thinking. That is
 the marketing strategy to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :retain
keep
 their customers and to establish trust between them. In addition
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 groups of young You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
especially
 those who are a This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :juvenileadolescent
teenager
 they do not understand what is needed
 to their everyday life This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 that shoppers are easily
 diverted to their minds. They depend on social networking services, particularly
 Facebook where the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reside
live
 program is organized
Consider replacing "in a glamorous way" with the adverb for "glamorous"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a glamorous way
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 that You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 can You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpurchasebargainacquisitioninvestment
buy
 their product.

In conclusion
, for saving time, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpurchasebargainacquisitioninvestment
buy
 unimportant products which do not exist in their everyday This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :resides
lives
. This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :national authoritypublic authority
Government
 should take the step for this type of ad issue and ensure a rich world heritage for future generations. 