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Some people say supermarkets should have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packages for products they sell. Others say it is the responsibility of consumers by avoiding such products. Discuss both views and provide examples. v.2

Some people say supermarkets should have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packages for products they sell. Others say it is the responsibility of consumers by avoiding such products. v. 2
Many hypermarkets use plastic in packaging their products as it can store the product for a long time. Many people say that they need to reduce the quantity of packaging and others cite that it is the responsibility of customers to shun such products. This essay will discuss both the views and justify with some illustrations. It is an irrefutable fact that plastic is the prime causative factor for pollution, and use of plastic in packing will increase it the amount of this un-degradable substance globally. Many companies use polythene to store the product for a long time which directly proportional to the escalation of the use of plastic in daily life. It is said that more than 95% of products which are sold in marts are wrapped in plastic. So supermarts should be responsible to reduce this non-eco-friendly substance. On the other hand, consumers should be also liable to eradicate these products as they are not only increasing the pollution but also hazardous to health. Plastic contains some chemical variables like carbon and hydrogen which can react with any organic or inorganic substance and results in some detrimental effects. It is exemplified in Thailand that 1562 people were hospitalized and 160 died when they consumed a newly introduced chocolate which is wrapped in plastic. So people should be more accountable for avoiding the products packaged in plastic. In conclusion, it is evident that plastic is ubiquitous in everyone' s sphere. Increase in use of plastic will not only results in increased pollution but also have some deleterious effects on humans. So, both markets and consumers are responsible for use of plastic.
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hypermarkets
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use
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plastic
in packaging their
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products
as it can store the
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product
for a long time.
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Many
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people
say that they need to
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reduce
the quantity of packaging
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and others
cite that it is the responsibility of customers to shun such
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products
. This essay will discuss both the views and justify with
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some
illustrations.

It is an irrefutable fact that
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plastic
is the prime causative factor for pollution, and
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use
of
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plastic
in packing will increase it the amount of this
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un-degradable
substance globally.
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Many
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companies
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use
polythene to store the
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product
for a long time which
directly
proportional to the escalation of the
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use
of
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plastic
in daily life. It
is said
that more than 95% of
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products
which
are sold
in marts
are wrapped
in
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plastic
.
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So
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supermarts
should be responsible to
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reduce
this
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non-eco-friendly
substance.

On the other hand
, consumers should be
also
liable to eradicate these
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products
as they are not
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only
increasing the pollution
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but
also
hazardous to health.
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Plastic
contains
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some
chemical variables like carbon and hydrogen which can react with any organic or inorganic substance and results in
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some
detrimental effects. It
is exemplified
in Thailand that 1562
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people
were hospitalized
and 160
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died
when they consumed a
newly
introduced chocolate which
is wrapped
in
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plastic
.
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So
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people
should be more accountable for avoiding the
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products
packaged in plastic.

In conclusion
, it is evident that
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plastic
is ubiquitous in
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everyone&
#039; s sphere. Increase in
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use
of
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plastic
will not
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only
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results
in increased pollution
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but
also
have
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some
deleterious effects on humans.
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So
, both markets and consumers are responsible for
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use
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plastic
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say supermarkets should have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packages for products they sell. Others say it is the responsibility of consumers by avoiding such products. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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