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Some people say rich countries should help poor countries with food and clothes. Do you agree or disagree ?

Some people say rich countries should help poor countries with food and clothes. 0AEK9
It is believed that the country which are developed should provide food and clothes for the poor countries. I agree with this statement but it’s should not be mandatory. This essay will discuss why poor countries need food and clothes from rich countries. Firstly, the countries which are poor need financial support to enhance their lifestyles. If the rich countries support them by clothes and food then they can live their life as we all know without food clothes life is not possible. For instance, American is helping every year by providing food and clothes to Indian people living in Bihar which obviously helpful for needy people. Hence, for livihood everybody need food and clothes, so it’s really benefits to poor people. However, it’s should not be compulsary as it makes the people dependent on rich countries. Rather than depending on other they have to learn to be independent so they can be given financial help to run any small bussiness as their capabilities. For example, financial help in farming, animal husbandry which motivate people yo be self dependent and work hard. Even though food and clothes are useful for them the financial help to run any bussiness, as it will provide them food and shelter every time they want. To sum up, I agree if rich country provide food me shelter will obviously helpful but it’s should not be mandatory. Despite of that if poor people run business with some financial help they can improve their lifestyle.
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is believed
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country
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should provide
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food
and
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clothes
for the
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poor
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countries
. I
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with this statement
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but
it’s should not be mandatory. This essay will discuss why
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poor
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countries
need
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food
and
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clothes
from
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rich
countries.

Firstly
, the
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countries
which are
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poor
need
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financial
support to enhance their lifestyles. If the
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rich
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countries
support them by
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clothes
and
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food
then they can
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live
their life as we all know without
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food
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clothes
life is not possible.
For instance
, American is helping every year by providing
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food
and
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clothes
to Indian
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people
living in Bihar which
obviously
helpful for needy
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people
.
Hence
, for
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livihood
everybody need
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food
and
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clothes
,
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so
it’s
really
benefits to
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poor
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people
.

However
, it’s should not be
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compulsary
as it
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makes
the
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people
dependent on
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rich
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countries
.
Rather
than depending on other they
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have to
learn to be independent
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so
they can be
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given
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financial
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help
to run any
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small
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bussiness
as their capabilities.
For example
,
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financial
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help
in farming, animal husbandry which motivate
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people
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yo
be self dependent and work
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hard
.
Even though
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food
and
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clothes
are useful for them the
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financial
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help
to run any
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bussiness
, as it will provide them
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food
and shelter every time they want.

To sum up, I
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agree
if
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rich
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country
provide
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food
me shelter will
obviously
helpful
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but
it’s should not be mandatory.
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that if
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poor
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people
run business with
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some
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financial
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help
they can
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improve
their lifestyle.

IELTS essay Some people say rich countries should help poor countries with food and clothes.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
248 words
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