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some people say music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

some people say music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. with this opinion. Q0Y3
i quite agree with this statement. music can bring people of different culture and ages together. some people say that music is a language to communiacate with someone. we don't need to mastering others country's language to understanding the song from that country. we can enjoy the music from the foreign languange and from different eras. music such an art that can be enjoyed by everyone. parents and children must have been born in different times so they have different mindsets and passions but not a few of them have something in common in musical tastes. the child likes the kind of songs that are popular in the mother's era or the mother who likes the kind of songs that are popular in her child's era, they can listen together to music with happiness. they can discuss with each other about music that they both like so that there is a mutuality between mother and child. it can also strengthen the compactness of mother and child. not only with family, music can also unite people with different cultures. foreigners can get to know more about indonesia from types of indonesian's songs. at first they did not know about Indonesian culture, but after learning it through songs, they could make friends with Indonesians. people from different cultures can unite and share opinions about each other about songs. so that it will make a profit for each culture. their culture can be knowing by other country. and it is proof that music can unite culture or age
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music
can bring
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people
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different
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culture
and ages together.
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some
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people
say that
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music
is a language to
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communiacate
with someone.
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we
don't need to mastering others country's language to understanding the song from that country.
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we
can enjoy the
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music
from the foreign
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languange
and from
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different
eras.
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music
such an art that can
be enjoyed
by everyone.
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parents
and children
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must
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in
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different
times
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they have
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different
mindsets and passions
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but
not a few of them have something in common in musical tastes.
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the
child likes the kind of songs that are popular in the mother's era or the mother who likes the kind of songs that are popular in her child's era, they can listen together to
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music
with happiness.
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they
can discuss with each
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other
about
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music
that they both like
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so
that there is a mutuality between mother and child.
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it
can
also
strengthen the compactness of mother and child.
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not
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only
with family,
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music
can
also
unite
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people
with
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different
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cultures
.
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foreigners
can
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get
to know more about
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indonesia
from types of
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indonesian
's songs.
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at
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did not know about Indonesian
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culture
,
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but
after learning it through songs, they could
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make
friends with Indonesians.
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people
from
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different
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cultures
can unite and share opinions about each
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other
about songs.
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so
that it will
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make
a profit for each
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culture
.
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their
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culture
can
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be knowing
by
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other
country.
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and
it is proof that
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music
can unite
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culture
or
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age

IELTS essay some people say music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. with this opinion.

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