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Some children find some school subjects difficult ( for example maths or philosophy ) , so these subjects should be optional rather than compulsory. To what extend do you agree or disagree ?

Some children find some school subjects difficult ( for example maths or philosophy ), so these subjects should be optional rather than compulsory. qJEr
It is said that good leaders are gifted meanwhile others argue another option that the qualities of the leadership could be gained be the experiments during the lifetime. In this essay I will discuss both given arguments and answer the question directly with reasonable facts and examples. A number of people think that leadership qualities come to the life with a child. I am quite disagree with this view because it is a bit unreal to believe. Because every person who was bor with special leadership quality can be keep the graep accurate with some strict rules, but can not lead them to achieve success. For instance, that kind of leader cannot solve some problems which require experience. On the other words, I really agree with those who think that people obtain leadership qualities during their life. People gain experience by facing some difficulties or problems and solving them in the correct way. That kind of person can lead the team to the correct way and make them to achieve success. Because they are able to solve some problems because they have already faced that kind of difficulties. In conclusion, some people think that people collect leadership qualities during their lives while others say that it is gifted. I am definitely in favour of the first option.
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good
leaders
are gifted
meanwhile others argue another option that the
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qualities
of the
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leadership
could
be gained
be the experiments during the lifetime. In this essay I will discuss both
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given
arguments and answer the question
directly
with reasonable facts and examples.

A number of
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people
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think
that
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leadership
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qualities
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come
to the life with a child. I am quite
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disagree
with this view
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because
it is a bit unreal to believe.
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Because
every person who was
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bor
with special
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leadership
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quality
can be
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keep
the
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graep
accurate with
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some
strict
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rules
,
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but
can not lead them to achieve success.
For instance
, that kind of leader cannot solve
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some
problems which require experience.

On the other words, I
really
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agree
with those who
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think
that
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people
obtain
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leadership
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qualities
during their life.
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People
gain experience by facing
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some
difficulties or problems and solving them in the correct way. That kind of person can lead the team to the correct way and
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make
them to achieve success.
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Because
they are able to solve
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some
problems
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because
they have already faced that kind of difficulties.

In conclusion
,
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some
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people
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think
that
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people
collect
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leadership
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qualities
during their
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lives
while others say that it
is gifted
. I am definitely in
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favour
of the
first
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IELTS essay Some children find some school subjects difficult ( for example maths or philosophy ), so these subjects should be optional rather than compulsory.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
217 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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