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Some people say it is important to keep your home tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place. What is your opinion about this. v.2

Some people say it is important to keep your home tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place. What is your opinion about this. v. 2
Personality of the person judge by their behaviour. A group of people have perception that it is very important to be clean and proper organised whether one at home or office. I totally agree with the opinion and my inclination justified in ensuing paragraphs. Among the various viewpoints, the strongest one is, looks of the home or office desk represents the personality of person. Many guests regularly visit a person at home and their first perception build by the appearance of the place. For instance, if the place is messy, then in creates bad impact on the mind of the visitors. Moreover, the habit of to live in a neat area reduce the chances of health issues. Unorganised places becomes the first priority of the insects. Regularly cleaning at the place helps to keep healthy. Furthermore, proper managed workplace is time efficient. Employees on the workplace can easily search well organised documents which are of various category. For example, allocation of the cupboard to maintain the files in the bank helps executive to find the files of loans or new account opening easily, and improves the accessibility of documents. Apart from this, neat and clean workplace improves the productivity of the workers. Neat the clean place directly effect in the mind and person' s behaviour. Some time people got angry when they find difficulty to get the document which misplaced on the desk by person itself. In Conclusion, arrangement of the places represents the behaviour or personality of a human being. Good appearance of home and proper organised desk creates positive impact on person' s mind.
Personality of the
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person
judge by their
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behaviour
. A group of
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people
have perception that it is
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very
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important
to be clean and proper
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organised
whether one at home or office. I
totally
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agree
with the opinion and my inclination justified in ensuing paragraphs.

Among the various viewpoints, the strongest one is, looks of the home or office desk represents the personality of
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person
.
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Many
guests
regularly
visit a
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person
at home and their
first
perception build by the appearance of the
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place
.
For instance
, if the
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place
is messy, then in creates
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
impact on the mind of the visitors.
Moreover
, the habit of to
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live
in a neat area
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reduce
the chances of health issues.
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Unorganised
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places
becomes the
first
priority of the insects.
Regularly
cleaning at the
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place
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helps
to
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keep
healthy.

Furthermore
, proper managed workplace is time efficient. Employees on the workplace can
easily
search
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well organised
documents which are of various category.
For example
, allocation of the cupboard to maintain the files in the bank
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helps
executive to find the files of loans or new account opening
easily
, and
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improves
the accessibility of documents. Apart from this, neat and clean workplace
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improves
the productivity of the workers. Neat the clean
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place
directly
effect in the mind and
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person&
#039; s
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behaviour
.
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Some
time
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people
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got
angry when they find difficulty to
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get
the document which misplaced on the desk by
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person
itself.

In Conclusion
, arrangement of the
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places
represents the
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behaviour
or personality of a human being.
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Good
appearance of home and proper
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organised
desk creates
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positive
impact on
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person&
#039; s mind.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people say it is important to keep your home tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place. What is your opinion about this. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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