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Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organized and in the correct place. v.10

Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organized and in the correct place. v. 10
Several people believe to keep things neat, organized and placing daily use belongings in right place not only in home also in office location. I strongly agree on this statement and to justify this essay will provide convincing examples Firstly, there are people who usually misplace their properties like keys in home and project materials in office. Later end up in wasting lot of time by searching in wrong locations, sometimes they also insist their loved to help them to find what they are looking for. To prove that Standford University had done many surveys with the age group of 20 to 60 years and the results show that 70% of people who are older than 40+ losing time because of not keeping their stuffs in the correct place. However, just 30% of people have never come crossed due to following tidiness in their surroundings. On the other hand, it is not important all the things have to be place in the correct locations. As much as people aware that for time being it is not kept in the desire place it be would fine. For instance, I enjoy reading, I have taken a book from shelf and I will be carrying to bedroom, study and living room till I finish reading the book. By this way I aware that something I must complete in time. It is kind of reminder to achieve something which is important to me. To conclude, keeping things organized and placing it in the right place is easy to get the stuffs at the time when needed however certain things which we use often has not to be in right place.
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people
believe to
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keep
things neat, organized and placing daily
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belongings in right
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place
not
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only
in home
also
in office location. I
strongly
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agree
on this statement and to justify this essay will provide convincing
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examples


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, there are
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people
who
usually
misplace their properties like keys in home and project materials in office. Later
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end
up in wasting
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lot of
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by searching in
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wrong
locations,
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they
also
insist their
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loved
to
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help them to find
what they are looking for. To prove that
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University had done
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many
surveys with the age group of 20 to 60 years and the results
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show
that 70% of
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people
who are older than 40+ losing
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time
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because
of not keeping their stuffs in the correct
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place
.
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,
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30% of
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have never
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crossed due to following tidiness in their surroundings.

On the other hand
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all the things
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be
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place
in the correct locations. As much as
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aware that for
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time
being it is not
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kept
in the desire
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it be would fine.
For instance
, I enjoy reading, I have taken a book from shelf and I will be carrying to bedroom, study and living room till I finish reading the book. By this way I aware that something I
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must
complete in
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time
. It is kind of reminder to achieve something which is
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important
to me.

To conclude
, keeping things organized and placing it in the right
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place
is easy to
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get
the stuffs at the
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time
when needed
however
certain things which we
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use
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often
has not to be in right
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place
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organized and in the correct place. v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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