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Some people say companies should require all employees to wear uniforms at work Others think it is unnecessary Discuss both view and give your own opinion v.2

Some people say companies should require all employees to wear uniforms at work Others think it is unnecessary 2
In recent decades, the question of whether employees should wear uniforms at work or not has received a great deal of public attention. Although this trend can be harmful in many cases, the benefits will be greater. There are a number of reasons why people should not wear uniforms. First, since people wear clothes from the company every day, they will feel dull and uncomfortable. In fact, the same clothes will have problems in psychology because they see clothes image that repeats day by day, which will be making their creative low. Second, sometimes that clothes are not fit with their body, or even they do not like company clothes designs, then they will feel uncomfortable and unexpected, which make reduce their productivity, and they will wear their clothes without inform. There are also a number of reasons why people should wear uniforms. First, in order to the basic authentic identity of employees fast, they are just wearing the clothes of their company. For example, the company should design and make clothes, which protector can see and know the person who is the employee of his company. Second, uniforms are not only authentic but also the face of the company, and they also can make increase values for the company. This means that with a beautiful design, the company can send a text on clothes to everyone and the company will look like more professional. In conclusion, although People think that employees should not wear uniforms, my own view is that they should wear uniforms when work to bring satisfaction for the company and them.
In recent decades,
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the question of whether
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at work or not has received a great deal of public attention. Although this trend can be harmful in
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cases, the benefits will be greater.

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should not
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wear
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.
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from the
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company
every day, they will feel dull and uncomfortable. In fact, the same
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clothes
will have problems in psychology
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they
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image that repeats day by day, which will be making their creative low. Second,
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sometimes
that
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clothes
are not fit with their body, or even they do not like
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company
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designs, then they will feel uncomfortable and unexpected, which
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their productivity, and they will
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without inform.

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people
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wear
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uniforms
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employees
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fast
, they are
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wearing the
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of their
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company
should design and
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, which protector can
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see
and know the person who is the
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. Second,
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authentic
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make
increase values for the
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company
. This means that with a
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beautiful
design, the
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company
can
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a text on
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to everyone and the
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company
will look like more professional.

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, although
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People
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, my
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view is that they should
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wear
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uniforms
when work to bring satisfaction for the
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company
and them.
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40Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people say companies should require all employees to wear uniforms at work Others think it is unnecessary 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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