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Some people say companies should require all employees to wear uniforms at work. others think it is unnecessary. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.2

Some people say companies should require all employees to wear uniforms at work. others think it is unnecessary. v. 2
Some organizations nowadays tend to force their staff to wear uniforms at work. However, it is argued that we should let our employees be freedom for choosing clothes to put in at work. In my view, both sides have their own reasons which may relate to the productivity of their company, or this is the company's culture existing for a long time. To start with the opinion wearing uniforms, it might be suitable for some companies with a long history because this reflects its culture. In other words, staff can represent the face of their organization by using uniforms. Moreover, the other reason is to promote themselves in order to get more attention from the other. The more famous they are, the more opportunities they get so as to widen their size. To illustrate, employees from big cooperation such as Coca Cola or Honda are encouraged to wear the same type of cloth when doing their job. Thus, this makes sense to encourage people wearing uniforms in their work place. On the other hand, others consider it is better to let people put on casual clothes at work. Perhaps, this is a good idea for companies which are led by the young executives because these leaders think they can motivate the creativities, innovation and improve productivity by letting their workers feel free from selecting any kinds of clothes to put in. Many national banks or business offices are now launching the new policies that their staff can wear any clothes they want, but they must have to satisfy the local culture and be professional, for example, Shinhan Bank or Vietbank. Hence, by letting people wear casual clothes, young companies may also influence a new inspiration for their employees and the others as well. In conclusion, although these are the contrast of wearing casual clothes and uniforms at work place, each of these opinions all have their reasons inside such as the company's history, or encourage productivity. Personally, I think it is better if we adapt the company's culture to wear the suitable clothes or we could be fired by trying to be different.
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organizations nowadays tend to force their staff to
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reasons which may relate to the productivity of their
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company
, or this is the
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's
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culture
existing for a long time.

To
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with the opinion wearing
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uniforms
, it might be suitable for
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companies
with a long history
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because
this reflects its
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culture
. In
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other
words, staff can represent the face of their organization by using
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uniforms
.
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, the
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other
reason is to promote themselves in order to
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get
more attention from the
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other
. The more
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famous
they are, the more opportunities they
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widen their size. To illustrate, employees from
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big
cooperation such as Coca Cola or Honda
are encouraged
to
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wear
the same type of
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cloth
when doing their job.
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, this
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makes
sense to encourage
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people
wearing
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in their
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work
place.

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hand, others consider it is better to
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let
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people
put on casual
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at
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work
. Perhaps, this is a
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good
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for
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companies
which
are led
by the young executives
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these leaders
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they can motivate the
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creativities
, innovation and
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improve
productivity by letting their workers feel free from selecting any kinds of
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clothes
to put in.
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Many
national banks or business offices are
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now
launching the new policies that their staff can
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wear
any
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clothes
they want,
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they
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satisfy the local
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culture
and be professional,
for example
,
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Shinhan
Bank or
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Vietbank
.
Hence
, by letting
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people
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wear
casual
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clothes
, young
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companies
may
also
influence a new inspiration for their employees and the others
as well
.

In conclusion
, although these are the contrast of wearing casual
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clothes
and
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uniforms
at
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work
place, each of these opinions all have their reasons inside such as the
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company
's history, or encourage productivity.
Personally
, I
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think
it is better if we adapt the
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company
's
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culture
to
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wear
the suitable
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clothes or
we could
be fired
by trying to be
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different
.
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IELTS essay Some people say companies should require all employees to wear uniforms at work. others think it is unnecessary. v. 2

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  American English
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