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Some people said that with the help of parenting and child development courses parents can improve the life of children. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people said that with the help of parenting and child development courses parents can improve the life of children. v. 1
Parenting courses have become a growing trend over the last two years. A number people believe that the life quality of children can be improved by parents who attend in parenting and child development courses which help them about parenting. I completely agree with the idea that parenting courses are the best way to improve both parenting skills and children’s lives. Firstly, communication is key to any relationship. Communicating with children is essential as they grow up. Parenting classes play an important role in improving relationships and the quality of communication between parents and children. These classes generally focus a lot of different communication styles with the children that is best suited for different situations. For instance, it helps maintain a healthy, positive and happy relation between parents and children. Therefore, parenting classes are important to build a strong relationship between parents and their children. Secondly, shaping personality at an early age is a necessity in favour of children. Another important point in associated with parenting classes is that they can improve children's behaviour. To illustrate, children of parents who participate in parenting education programs often demonstrate increases in their behaviours (e. g. , empathy, sharing, helping others) and decreases in negative externalizing behaviours (e. g. , aggression, delinquency, hyperactivity). Hence, these educational programs can help children to from their personality in a right way. In conclusion, many parents attend in child development classes these days. I fully agree with the view that thanks to parenting and child development education programs, parents improve effectively the life of their children.
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courses have become a growing trend over the last two years. A number
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believe that the life quality of
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children
can be
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parents
who attend in
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parenting
and child development courses which
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help
them about
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. I completely
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idea
that
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parenting
courses are the best way to
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improve
both
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parenting
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skills
and
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children’s
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lives
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Firstly
, communication is key to any relationship. Communicating with
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children
is essential as they grow up.
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Parenting
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classes
play an
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important
role in improving relationships and the quality of communication between
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parents
and
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children
. These
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classes
generally
focus
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a lot of
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different
communication styles with the
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children
that is
best suited for
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different
situations.
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helps
maintain a healthy,
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positive
and happy relation between
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parents
and
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children
.
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,
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parenting
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classes
are
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important
to build a strong relationship between
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parents
and their children.

Secondly
, shaping personality at an early age is a necessity in
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favour
of
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children
. Another
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point in associated with
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parenting
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classes
is that they can
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improve
children's
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behaviour
. To illustrate,
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children
of
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parents
who participate in
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parenting
education programs
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demonstrate increases in their
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empathy, sharing, helping others) and decreases in
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negative
externalizing
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aggression, delinquency, hyperactivity).
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, these educational programs can
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help
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children
to from their personality
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in a right way
.

In conclusion
,
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many
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parents
attend in child development
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classes
these days. I
fully
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agree
with the view that thanks to
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parenting
and child development education programs,
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parents
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improve
effectively
the life of their
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children
.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people said that with the help of parenting and child development courses parents can improve the life of children. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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