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Some people propose that smoking should be banned completely. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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In the contemporary era, smoking has been one of the discussed issues because it has lots of drawbacks. However, some individuals claim that smoking should be prohibited due to the causes of various diseases as well as unhealthy also. I agree with this statement. In, the forthcoming passage will articulate some reasons for the following notion. To begin with, the most predominant reason is that smoking is the main reason for chronic diseases like cancer and heart disease. The nicotine of cigarettes is not good for health; it is gradually damaged human organs as a result they suffered ample health issues. For example, the world health organization reported that the people who suffered from lung cancer or health diseases. For this reason, the government imposed heavy taxes on purchasing and producing cigarettes. However, some groups of people claim that smoking work as a stress reliever and also improve their thinking power but in reality, the people who are not a smoker, are suffering most as well as they are also affected by several deadliest diseases. Furthermore, folks are affected financially also thus the price of cigarettes is higher, and also if they faced any medical care due to smoking they need to go through long treatment. For example, a survey has been conducted a few years ago and reported that smokers spend up to 200 dollars daily purchasing cigarettes. To conclude, I believe there are no benefits to smoking cigarettes because it caused loss of health and money also. So the production of unhealthy cigarettes and marketing should be forbidden.
In the contemporary era,
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smoking
has been one of the discussed issues
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because
it has lots of drawbacks.
However
,
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some
individuals claim that
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smoking
should
be prohibited
due to the causes of various
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diseases
as well
as unhealthy
also
. I
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agree
with this statement. In, the forthcoming passage will articulate
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some
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reasons
for the following notion.

To
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begin
with, the most predominant
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reason
is that
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smoking
is the main
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reason
for chronic
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diseases
like cancer and heart
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disease
. The nicotine of
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cigarettes
is not
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good
for
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health
; it is
gradually
damaged human organs
as a result
they suffered ample
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health
issues.
For example
, the world
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health
organization reported that the
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people
who suffered from lung cancer or
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health
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diseases
. For this
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reason
, the
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government
imposed heavy taxes on purchasing and producing cigarettes.

However
,
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some
groups of
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people
claim that
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smoking
work as a
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stress
reliever and
also
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improve
their thinking power
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but
in reality,

the
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people
who are not a smoker, are suffering most
as well
as they are
also
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affected
by several deadliest
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diseases
.
Furthermore
, folks are
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affected
financially
also
thus
the price of
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cigarettes
is higher, and
also
if they faced any medical care due to
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smoking
they need to go through long treatment.
For example
, a survey has
been conducted
a few years ago and reported that smokers spend up to 200 dollars daily purchasing cigarettes.

To conclude
, I believe there are no benefits to
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smoking
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cigarettes
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because
it caused loss of
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health
and money
also
.
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So
the production of unhealthy
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cigarettes
and marketing should
be forbidden
.
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IELTS essay Some people propose that smoking should be banned completely.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
260 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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