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In recent years, many countries desire to host international sports events because of great benefits.

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In recent years, many countries desire to host international sports events because of great benefits. Conversely, some parts of the world believe that it has many disadvantages. In my point of view, I think that these views have both pros and cons. To begin with, there are several drawbacks to hosting a major international sporting event. First, it contributes to the national budget imbalance. Since the government spends public funds to upgrade stadiums to meet international standards. They must also engage staff and media businesses to manage all of the responsibilities and resolve any issues. Therefore, investments in health, education, and other areas are significantly reduced. Second, becoming matter might readily cause pollution in the environment. To clarify, sporting events draw huge audiences, which can result in a large amount of rubbish, such as empty bottles, plastic bags, and other items. As a result, the environment must accept a large quantity of waste, which has a negative impact on the air quality. Nonetheless, holding an international sporting event has certain advantages as well as downsides for the country. The first is a major economic development promotion. While hosting may be well-known in other nations, worldwide contacts will be established. As a result, tourist and export industries are growing gradually, as is the overall economy of the country. The following is that the citizen life of the sports event matter will be enhanced economically. Because certain personal enterprises, such as hotels, restaurants, tourism agencies, and so on, offer revenue prospects. Resultantly, profits would be experienced a significant increase many times more than usual. In conclusion, the country is hosting for an worldwide sporting event while could be witnessed advantages such as promote economic development of that country as well as residents, some disadvantages remain exist like budget deficit, environment pollution. Personally, becoming matter of these celebrations play a vital role in the country’s advancement.
In recent years,
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desire to host
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international
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events
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because
of great benefits.
Conversely
,
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parts of the world believe that it has
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disadvantages. In my point of view, I
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think
that these views have both pros and cons.

To
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begin
with, there are several drawbacks to hosting a major
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international
sporting
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event
.
First
, it contributes to the national budget imbalance.
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Since
the
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government
spends public funds to upgrade stadiums to
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meet
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international
standards. They
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must
also
engage staff and media businesses to manage
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all of the
responsibilities and resolve any issues.
Therefore
, investments in health, education, and other areas are
significantly
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reduced
. Second, becoming matter might
readily
cause pollution in the environment. To clarify, sporting
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events
draw huge audiences, which can result in a large amount of rubbish, such as empty bottles, plastic bags, and other items.
As a result
, the environment
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must
accept a large quantity of waste, which has a
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negative
impact on the air quality.

Nonetheless, holding an
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international
sporting
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event
has certain advantages
as well
as downsides for the
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country
. The
first
is a major economic development promotion. While hosting may be well-known in other nations, worldwide contacts will
be established
.
As a result
, tourist and export industries are growing
gradually
, as is the
overall
economy of the
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country
. The following is that the citizen life of the sports
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event
matter will
be enhanced
economically
.
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Because
certain personal enterprises, such as hotels, restaurants, tourism agencies, and
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so
on, offer revenue prospects.
Resultantly
, profits would
be experienced
a significant increase
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many
times more than usual.

In conclusion
, the
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country
is hosting for
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an
worldwide sporting
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event
while could
be witnessed
advantages such as promote economic development of that
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country
as well
as residents,
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some
disadvantages remain exist like budget deficit, environment pollution.
Personally
, becoming matter of these celebrations play a vital role in the
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country’s
advancement.
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IELTS essay In recent years, many countries desire to host international sports events because of great benefits.

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