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Some people prefer to stay in the same job for the same company, but others prefer to change jobs frequently. Discuss v.2

Some people prefer to stay in the same job for the same company, but others prefer to change jobs frequently. Discuss v. 2
It is common knowledge that work plays key roles in society. The question, however, arises is it better to stick to one job in the same company or to change it from time to time. This essay will discuss both sides of the argument and provide relevant examples. First and foremost, it is often claimed that many people easy accustom to their job and do not like to change their practice. Most of the people are afraid of new experience they prefer safe, peaceful and stable life rather than getting something new. For instance, keeping one job give people felling of comfortable and nothing to worry about. Another benefit of staying in one job is that we are gaining more experience and expertise in our specific profession. Which may lead us to get a promotion when the employer will see our loyalty and devotion. On the other hand, however, it is often claimed that changing a company gives as a chance to discuss better salary and work agreements. Moreover, new employment often means a new experience in totally different environment, which has an enormous value on the market place. Besides, it is well known fact that employers are keen to promote people which have experience from more that one working place. From the arguments I have presented above it can be seen that both arguments definitely have their supporters and opponents. In my opinion in today’s world we have so many opportunities that would be such a waste of life to spend it in one job. We should encourage our self to be more active not only in the working environment but also in our whole life in general.
It is common knowledge that work plays key roles in society. The question,
however
, arises is it better to stick to one
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job
in the same
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company
or to
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change
it from time to time. This essay will discuss both sides of the argument and provide relevant examples.

First
and foremost, it is
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often
claimed that
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many
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people
easy accustom to their
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job
and do not like to
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change
their practice. Most of the
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people
are afraid of
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new
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experience
they prefer safe, peaceful and stable life
rather
than getting something
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new
.
For instance
, keeping one
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job
give
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people
felling of comfortable and nothing to worry about. Another benefit of staying in one
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job
is that we are gaining more
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experience
and expertise in our specific profession. Which may lead us to
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get
a promotion when the employer will
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see
our loyalty and devotion.

On the other hand
,
however
, it is
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often
claimed that changing a
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company
gives as a chance to discuss better salary and work agreements.
Moreover
,
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new
employment
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often
means a
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new
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experience
in
totally
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different
environment, which has an enormous value on the market place.
Besides
, it is well known fact that employers are keen to promote
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people
which have
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experience
from more that one working place.

From the arguments I have presented above it can be
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seen
that both arguments definitely have their supporters and opponents. In my opinion in
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today
’s world we have
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so
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many
opportunities that would be such a waste of life to spend it in one
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job
. We should encourage our self to be more active not
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only
in the working environment
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but
also
in our whole life
in general
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people prefer to stay in the same job for the same company, but others prefer to change jobs frequently. Discuss v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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