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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, prefer to take risks and think that change is a positive thing. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion. v.2

Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, prefer to take risks and think that change is a positive thing. v. 2
Nobody could deny that, in our fast-paced world, things rarely stay the same. We can choose to embrace change or try to avoid it. Whether we consider change to be positive or negative probably depends, to a large extent, in our personality type. Introverts tend to seek stability and fear change. This is partly because having a set routine reduces stress and require less cognitive activity. Life can feel a great deal more manageable without challenges and you can operate successfully within your comfort zone. A related point is that those who hide from change hardly ever put themselves at risk. Life for them is significantly safer. Another explanation put forward by many who adopt this strategy is that they find life satisfying and there is, therefore, little point in seeking anything different. Extroverts thrive on variety. By seeking out new experiences they give themselves the opportunity to widen their horizons, grow emotionally, develop new skills and abilities and increase the size of their social circle. As a result of this attitude, they are likely to experience economic benefits. What's more, as they try new things, they are bound to find the excitement and pleasure, and certain to escape the boredom and misery which they believe would result from repeating the same activities again and again. Many introverts are genuinely perplexed by the apparent need of others to constantly search for novelty. Similarly, extroverts imagine that the lives of those who prefer stability must be monotonous, tedious and dull. In reality, most of us would benefit from being slightly more balanced. Those who crave adventure might actually enjoy a little calmness and tranquility, while some stimulation and an occasional challenge would brighten the existence of those who try to keep it at a distance.
Nobody could deny that, in our
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-paced world, things rarely stay the same. We can choose to embrace
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change
or try to avoid it. Whether we consider
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change
to be
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positive
or
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negative
probably
depends, to a large extent, in our personality type.

Introverts tend to seek stability and fear
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change
. This is partly
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because
having a set routine
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reduces
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stress
and require less cognitive activity. Life can feel a great deal more manageable without challenges and you can operate
successfully
within your comfort zone. A related point is that those
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who
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hide
from
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change
hardly ever put themselves at
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risk
. Life for them is
significantly
safer. Another explanation put forward by
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many
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who
adopt this strategy is that they find life satisfying and there is,
therefore
,
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little
point in seeking anything
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different
.

Extroverts thrive on variety. By seeking out new experiences they give themselves the opportunity to widen their horizons, grow
emotionally
, develop new
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skills
and abilities and increase the size of their social circle.
As a result
of this attitude, they are likely to experience economic benefits. What's more, as they try new things, they
are bound
to find the excitement and pleasure, and certain to escape the boredom and misery which they believe would result from repeating the same activities again and again.

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Many
introverts are
genuinely
perplexed by the apparent need of others to
constantly
search for novelty.
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, extroverts imagine that the
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lives
of those
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who
prefer stability
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must
be monotonous, tedious and dull. In reality, most of us would benefit from being
slightly
more balanced. Those
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who
crave adventure might actually enjoy a
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little
calmness and tranquility, while
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some
stimulation and an occasional challenge would brighten the existence of those
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who
try to
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keep
it at a distance.
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IELTS essay Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, prefer to take risks and think that change is a positive thing. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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