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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. v.14

Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. v. 14
There are arguments that individuals should be refrained from doing new things and must stick to traditional methods. However, some people are convinced that individuals need to venture into some noble experiences in life. In my opinion, I would argue that alterations in some activities and practices are essential to achieving progress and success. Primarily, it can never be denied that some people may become comfortable with the routine practices in life, which they are more accustomed. Clearly, people will not need to learn new things as they are already more cognizant about the activities that they habitually perform. For instance, in this modern era, the seniority group will find it confusing to read newspapers on an electronic tablet due to the fact that they are not aware of its new features and the proper operation of the gadget. For these reasons, the geriatric individuals do not need to learn the settings and the high technology applications as it will take them a long period of time to adapt this product of technology. However, it can be argued that the life of people will become more adventurous if they opt to new trends and experiences. As can be expected, the progress and success in life are often achieved when a person tries to explore new ideas and practices, which might be beneficial for the improvement of his or her life. To illustrate, a businessman, who have experienced failures in his or her business, will resort to new strategies in order to make the business more firms and highly profitable. This can be done by abandoning the old-fashioned styles and techniques while accepting the modern ways, which could make the people’s lives more favourable. The new idea, a new way of life and changes to the old way life often bring new opportunities to people and getting adapted to the changes is the primary means of survivals and advancement. In conclusion, there is a heated argument whether people must remain to the conservative ways of life or resort to modern trends. However, I personally believe that the ideology of success can be reached if people will embrace the new-fangled ways of living in the society.
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be refrained
from doing
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new
things and
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must
stick to traditional methods.
However
,
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some
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people
are convinced
that individuals need to venture into
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some
noble experiences in
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life
. In my opinion, I would argue that alterations in
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some
activities and practices are essential to achieving progress and success.

Primarily
, it can never
be denied
that
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some
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people
may become comfortable with the routine practices in
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life
, which they are more accustomed.
Clearly
,
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people
will not need to learn
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new
things as they are already more cognizant about the activities that they
habitually
perform.
For instance
, in this modern era, the seniority group will find it confusing to read newspapers on an electronic tablet due to the fact that they are not aware of its
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new
features and the proper operation of the gadget. For these reasons, the geriatric individuals do not need to learn the settings and the high technology applications as it will take them a long period of time to adapt this product of technology.

However
, it can
be argued
that the
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life
of
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people
will become more adventurous if they opt to
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new
trends and experiences. As can be
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expected
, the progress and success in
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life
are
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often
achieved when a person tries to explore
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new
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ideas
and practices, which might be beneficial for the improvement of
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his or her
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life
. To illustrate, a businessman, who have experienced failures in
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his or her
business, will resort to
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new
strategies in order to
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make
the business more firms and
highly
profitable. This can
be done
by abandoning the
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old
-fashioned styles and techniques while accepting the modern
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ways
, which could
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make
the
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people’s
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lives
more
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favourable
. The
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new
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idea
, a
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new
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way
of
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life
and
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changes
to the
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old
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way
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life
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often
bring
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new
opportunities to
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people
and getting adapted to the
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changes
is the primary means of survivals and advancement.

In conclusion
, there is a heated argument whether
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people
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must
remain to the conservative
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ways
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
or resort to modern trends.
However
, I
personally
believe that the ideology of success can
be reached
if
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people
will embrace the
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new-fangled
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ways
of living in the society.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. v. 14

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
364 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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