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"Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment?"

"Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment? " qXXE
One of the most conspicuous trend of today era is the living in independent house but same time many persons believe that they are more benefits to stay in condos. They are several advantages staying in a own house rather to stay in apartment. They are myriad of reasons which will further elaborate this argument but the most preponderant stem is comfortness, In own house having lot of enjoyment in different ways like everyone having own bedroom, lot of free space in dining and kitchen area and same time kids can play in their lawn without any issue, on top of that no extra charges for parking and water bills. In addition, Value of the land, at present market several people investing money in real estate therefore automatically the Family house value increasing a lot and it's useful to future generations. For Instance, As per the recent survey in many countries, 40% people are interested to stay in their own bunglow and the prices are increasing every year. On the other hand, several people are interested to stay in apartments but they are more drawbacks to living there. Firstly and foremost is kids can't play games in apartment due to several conditions from other flat owners therefore they have only one entertinement is television or videogames hence it's badly effected to the family. Secondly, safety of the building, most of the suites are very small and they don't have any proper fire safety rules therefore it's dangours to living there apart from that flat diprecration value is year by year decreasing. For Example, In CNN research who ever is living in apartments having more health issue due to the closed environment without any proper air transfer system. In conclusion, based on the aforementioned arguments it can be concluded that, majority of public is interested to stay in their villa rather than to conjusted apartment because they have more comforts in many ways like enjoyment and family gatherings and yearly the property value will increase.
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same time
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in condos. They are several advantages staying in
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a
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own
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house
rather
to
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stay
in
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apartment
. They are myriad of reasons which will
further
elaborate this

argument
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but
the most preponderant stem is
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comfortness
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having
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lot of
enjoyment in
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different
ways like everyone having
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own
bedroom,
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lot of
free space in dining and kitchen area and same time kids can play in their lawn without any issue,
on top of that
no extra charges for parking and water bills.
In addition
,
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Value
of the land, at present market several
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people
investing money in real estate
therefore
automatically
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the


Family
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house
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value
increasing a lot and it's useful to future generations.

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, As per the recent survey in
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many
countries, 40%
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people
are interested
to
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stay
in their
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own
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bunglow
and the prices are increasing every year.

On the other hand
, several
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people
are interested
to
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stay
in
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apartments
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but


they are more drawbacks to
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living
there.
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and foremost is kids can't play games in
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apartment
due to several conditions from other flat
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owners


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therefore
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entertinement
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hence
it's
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badly effected
to the family.

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, safety of the building, most of the suites are
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small and
they don't have any proper fire safety
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therefore
it's
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dangours
to
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there apart from that flat
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diprecration
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value
is year by year decreasing.

For Example
, In CNN research who ever is
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living
in
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apartments
having more health issue due to the closed environment without any proper air transfer system.
In conclusion
, based on the aforementioned arguments it

can
be concluded
that, majority of public
is interested
to
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stay
in their villa
rather
than to
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conjusted
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apartment
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because
they have more comforts in
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many
ways like enjoyment and family gatherings and yearly the property
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value
will increase.
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IELTS essay "Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment? "

Essay
  American English
9 paragraphs
334 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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