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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages to living in a house compared with living in an apartment? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment? v. 8
Everyone wants to live in comfort. Some people find independent houses more convenient while others prefer modern-day apartments. I believe living in an apartment is more advantageous than living in a house for several reasons. To start with, we are moving towards the culture of nuclear families where most adults work. Life is more stressful than ever and people have less time on hand. Given these circumstances, it is much easier to manage an apartment than an independent house. For instance, most apartments have housekeeping facilities that take care of all the cleaning and maintenance work, which we would have to manage ourselves if we live in a house. Additionally, apartments are usually gated communities so they are a lot more secure. To exemplify, most apartments would have some sort of access cards for residents and stickers to identify their vehicles. Any visitors or guests will first have to go through the security, who will seek approval from the residents before allowing them inside. Overall, the security parameters are better than one can afford in a house. Furthermore, apartments have common facilities like recreational/play area for kids, swimming pools, sports, club houses and so on. One does not have to travel outside of their home to access these facilities. This results in a lot of time savings. Parents also feel it’s easier for them to allow their kids to play freely without any supervision. However, living in an independent house does have its own advantages. They are certainly more spacious and owners can freely utilise and modify the space based on their convenience, which is hard to achieve in an apartment. To conclude, apartments and houses have their set of pros and cons. However, I believe that apartments satisfy the needs of our modern lifestyle better than independent houses.
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live
in comfort.
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Some
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people
find
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independent
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houses
more convenient while others prefer modern-day
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apartments
. I believe living in an
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apartment
is more advantageous than living in a
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house
for several reasons.

To
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start
with, we are moving towards the culture of nuclear families where most adults work. Life is more stressful than ever and
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people
have less time on hand.
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Given
these circumstances, it is much easier to manage an
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apartment
than an
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independent
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house
.
For instance
, most
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apartments
have housekeeping facilities that take care of all the cleaning and maintenance work, which we would
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have to
manage ourselves if we
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live
in a
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house
.

Additionally
,
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apartments
are
usually
gated communities
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so
they are a lot more secure. To exemplify, most
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apartments
would have
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some
sort of access cards for residents and stickers to identify their vehicles. Any visitors or guests will
first
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have to
go through the security, who will seek approval from the residents
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before
allowing them inside.
Overall
, the security parameters are better than one can afford in a
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house
.
Furthermore
,
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apartments
have common facilities like recreational/play area for kids, swimming pools, sports, club
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houses
and
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so
on. One does not
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have to
travel
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outside of
their home to access these facilities. This results in
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a lot of
time savings. Parents
also
feel it’s easier for them to
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allow
their kids to play
freely
without any supervision.

However
, living in an
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independent
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house
does have its
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own
advantages. They are
certainly
more spacious and owners can
freely
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utilise
and modify the space based on their convenience, which is
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hard
to achieve in an apartment.

To conclude
,
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apartments
and
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houses
have their set of pros and cons.
However
, I believe that
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apartments
satisfy the needs of our modern lifestyle better than
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
independent
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
houses
.
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IELTS essay Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages to living in a house compared with living in an apartment?

Essay
  American English
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6.0
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