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Some people prefer to buy food in a supermarket, others prefer to do their food shopping online. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people prefer to buy food in a supermarket, others prefer to do their food shopping online. v. 1
Nowadays, online grocery shopping has grown increasingly in size and popularity. While many people choose to purchase food through the internet, Visiting a supermarket in person is still preferred by many. This essay will discuss why online shopping is popular in society, but why the traditional way of shopping will ultimately remain dominant. The main reason for the popularity of web-based shopping is that it saves the shoppers’ commuting time which allows people to purchase certain items and get delivered to their home without actually traveling to stores. To put it another way, online shopping is essentially convenient for people who do not have adequate times for grocery shopping. For example, office workers who have a tight working schedule that preventing them to visit a supermarket, are now available to buy meat, vegetable, and dairy products by a few clicks on their mouses. Therefore, it is the time effectiveness of online shopping that facilitates its attractiveness among the general public. Although online shopping is beneficial for busy people, the traditional way of food shopping, namely visiting a supermarket, provides a pleasantly positive experience to shoppers. It means that visiting a supermarket provides chances for people to physically see and touch a vast array of different products. To illustrate, people can confirm the freshness of a bag of orange or choose to buy a newly-cut pork loin at stores; it is enjoyable to select the best apple from the fruit section. It goes without saying that buying food in a supermarket is a significantly pleasurable experience for those who have times. As discussed above, it is not difficult to conclude that shopping digitally is convenient for people who lack times to buy food, shopping traditionally, however, is enjoyable for many people. In my opinion, I strongly believe that shopping at a supermarket in person is and will continue to be the major option for grocery shopping among citizens in the future
Nowadays,
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online
grocery
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shopping
has grown
increasingly
in size and popularity. While
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many
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people
choose to
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purchase
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food
through the internet, Visiting a supermarket in person is
still
preferred by
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many
. This essay will discuss why
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online
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shopping
is popular in society,
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but
why the traditional way of
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shopping
will
ultimately
remain dominant.

The main reason for the popularity of web-based
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shopping
is that it saves the shoppers’ commuting
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time
which
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allows
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people
to
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purchase
certain items and
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get
delivered to their home without actually traveling to stores. To put it another way,
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online
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shopping
is
essentially
convenient for
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people
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who
do not have adequate
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times
for grocery
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shopping
.
For example
, office workers
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who
have a tight working schedule that preventing them to visit a supermarket, are
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now
available to
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buy
meat, vegetable, and dairy products by a few clicks on their mouses.
Therefore
, it is the
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time
effectiveness of
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online
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shopping
that facilitates its attractiveness among the
Consider using "public".
general public
.

Although
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online
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shopping
is beneficial for busy
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people
, the traditional way of
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food
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shopping
,
namely
visiting a supermarket, provides a
pleasantly
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positive
experience to shoppers. It means that visiting a supermarket provides chances for
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people
to
physically
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see
and touch a vast array of
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different
products. To illustrate,
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people
can confirm the freshness of a bag of orange or choose to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
a
newly
-
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cut
pork loin at stores; it is enjoyable to select the best apple from the fruit section. It goes without saying that buying
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food
in a supermarket is a
significantly
pleasurable experience for those
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who
have times.

As discussed above, it is not difficult
to conclude
that
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shopping
digitally
is convenient for
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people
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who
lack
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times
to
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buy
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food
,
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shopping
traditionally
,
however
, is enjoyable for
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many
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people
. In my opinion, I
strongly
believe that
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shopping
at a supermarket in person is and will continue to be the major option for grocery
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shopping
among citizens in the
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future
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people prefer to buy food in a supermarket, others prefer to do their food shopping online. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
319 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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