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Some People prefer online classes, while others think that it is better to be in a traditional classroom. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.2

Some People prefer online classes, while others think that it is better to be in a traditional classroom. v. 2
Nowadays, learning online is not uncommon. There is a growing popularity of online courses that can be learned and taught directly through numerous educational websites. Some opponents still prefer gaining knowledge by attending classroom teaching. Irrespective of the arguments, I believe that acquiring education through online media is more beneficial than studying in a school. Through the course of this essay, I would like to put forth my views by considering both sides of the statement. To begin with, the traditional way of gaining a scholarship develops team building through the physical presence of all individuals in the class. Additionally, difficulties faced by the pupil are solved instantly through verbal discussions. Many times students of the school, college, university are inhabitants of the local area, and the certificates achieved from educational institutes have a higher value than certifications received from websites. But the contents and study materials of these institutes are confined to the defined curriculum. As a result, many learners are deprived of overall growth. However, the contemporary method of online learning is more convenient, flexible, cost-efficient. It is important to note that the syllabus involves self-learning and development. Self-learning is the core of these like students raise their doubts on forums and consider help and support options to get over their difficult situations. Furthermore, participants who prefer this type of learning are from worldwide. As a consequence, learners become intellectually sound and develop cognitive abilities. In conclusion, these days gaining knowledge through online sources has gained more popularity than school-based learning. But there are some people, who prefer the classroom as one of the best ways to become a scholar. I think that the online medium is more advantageous than learning in a class.
Nowadays,
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learning
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online
is not uncommon. There is a growing popularity of
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online
courses that can
be learned
and taught
directly
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through
numerous educational websites.
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Some
opponents
still
prefer gaining knowledge by attending classroom teaching. Irrespective of the arguments, I believe that acquiring education
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through
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online
media is more beneficial than studying in a school.
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Through
the course of this essay, I would like to put forth my views by considering both sides of the statement.

To
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begin
with, the traditional way of gaining a scholarship develops team building
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through
the physical presence of all individuals in the
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class
.
Additionally
, difficulties faced by the pupil
are solved
instantly
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through
verbal discussions.
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Many
times students of the school, college, university are inhabitants of the local area, and the certificates achieved from educational institutes have a higher value than certifications received from websites.
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But
the contents and study materials of these institutes
are confined
to the defined curriculum.
As a result
,
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many
learners
are deprived
of
overall
growth.

However
, the contemporary method of
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online
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learning
is more convenient, flexible, cost-efficient. It is
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important
to note that the syllabus involves self-learning and development. Self-learning is the core of these like students raise their doubts on forums and consider
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help
and support options to
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get
over their difficult situations.
Furthermore
, participants who prefer this type of
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learning
are from worldwide. As a consequence, learners become
intellectually
sound and develop cognitive abilities.

In conclusion
, these days gaining knowledge
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through
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
sources has gained more popularity than school-based
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learning
.
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But
there are
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some
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people
, who prefer the classroom as one of the best ways to become a scholar. I
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think
that the
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online
medium is more advantageous than
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learning
in a
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class
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Some People prefer online classes, while others think that it is better to be in a traditional classroom. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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