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Some people play sports when they are young but then stop doing physical exercise when they become adults. Why is this? What can be done to solve this problem?

Some people play sports when they are young but then stop doing physical exercise when they become adults. Why is this? What can be done to solve this problem? RN23G
It is been observed by many that after growing up people leave playing sports or doing physical activities while they were used to do it when they were young. This is happening due to numerous reasons and this essay will explain them by providing viable solutions. One of the major reasons why people lose interest in these activities because they get busy at work and don’t get enough time for it. Other than this, they have tons of responsibilities as being an adult which caught them up in household activities or personal reasons. As a result, they become lethargic eventually and stop doing any fitness activities. For instance, there was a survey in my organization for fitness and only 25% of employees voted for following their fitness routine. one of the possible reasons to overcome this issue is that sports tournaments or physical fitness classes should be organised at the workplace. Because you spend most of your time at work and by spending one or two hours weekly in these activities can regain their interest back. Moreover, this kind of programs gives company to that person for any games. For example, Google has started sports tournaments every Friday and almost 50% of their staff claims that due to this, they have started playing their favourite sports over the weekend. To conclude, Time and energy are the culprits to blame for this issue but the companies can help their employees by arranging sports and physical activities at and during a time of the work.
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that after growing up
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people
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leave
playing
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sports
or doing physical
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activities
while they were
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used to do
it when they were young. This is happening due to numerous
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reasons
and this essay will
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explain
them by providing viable solutions.

One of the major
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reasons
why
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people
lose interest in these
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activities
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because
they
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get
busy at work and don’t
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get
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enough
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time
for it. Other than this, they have tons of responsibilities as being an adult which caught them up in household
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activities
or personal
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reasons
.
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, they become lethargic
eventually
and
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stop
doing any
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fitness
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activities
.
For instance
, there was a survey in my organization for
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fitness
and
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only
25% of employees voted for following their
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fitness
routine.

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one
of the possible
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reasons
to overcome this issue is that
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sports
tournaments or physical
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fitness
classes should be
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organised
at the workplace.
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Because
you spend most of your
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time
at work and by spending one or two hours weekly in these
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activities
can regain their interest back.
Moreover
, this kind of programs gives
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company
to that person for any games.
For example
, Google has
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started
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sports
tournaments every Friday and almost 50% of their staff claims that due to this, they have
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started
playing their
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favourite
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sports
over the weekend.

To conclude
,
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Time
and energy are the culprits to blame for this issue
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but
the
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companies
can
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help
their employees by arranging
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sports
and physical
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activities
at and during a
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time
of the work.
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IELTS essay Some people play sports when they are young but then stop doing physical exercise when they become adults. Why is this? What can be done to solve this problem?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
6.0
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